The commercial airline industry in the country of Freedonia has experienced
impressive growth in the past three years. This trend will surely continue in the
years to come, since the airline industry will benefit from recent changes in
Freedonian society: incomes are rising; most employees now receive more
vacation time; and interest in travel is rising, as shown by an increase in media
attention devoted to foreign cultures and tourist attractions.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to
decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to
explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction
In the context, the author concludes that the commercial airline industry of the country Freedonia will continue its past three years significant economic growth in the upcoming years. To justify his statement, he notes several evidence like the people's incomes are enhancing along with thier vacation times & also the people of the Freedoia country interest in travelling outside the country is also rising. Though this proofs seems quite tenable but critical view will reveal that there are lot of loopholes among these evidences. Therefore, the argument can be considered as unpersuasive.
Firstly, the author assumes that the economic growth of the stated country will remain same for the upcoming years. This is an unwarranted assumption as economic growth can be change in the country due to several facts. Suppose for example, if this year the stock market would get a disestar then it will affect in the overall economy of the country. Like this, several catastrophies can also be a major issue to alternate the economic growth. Beside this, the author did not provide any evidence that the income has increased in all class of people among the society. It might be happened that a major number of people are restrained from the salary increament. If these facts have become true then the author conclusion will be undefensible.
Additionally, the author ambigiously wrote that the "most employee" have gained enhancement in their vacation time. However, he did not mention any numbers or percentage form that the evidence can be judged. He also cites that this increase vacation time is only for the employees but he did not clarify that about what percentage of the country people who are job holders. If the maximum people are not job holders then this increament in vacation time might not be evoked the airline industry profit. Another fact is that, the author readily posits that the travel interest is increasing among the people's of the country but he did not stated how that was determined. It might be happened that it is an arbitary assumption or people have interest only among domestic travelling. This facts happening will not be benifical for the airline industry. Beside all of this, it is not examined whether airline is a major transport medium for the Freedonia country. If airline is not the primary medium of transport then the estimited profit for the airline industry can be refuted.
Lastly, A proper survey among the people of the country to determining whether all of the class people has faced salary & vacation increament or not, can help the argument to be more cleared. If the results of the survey come out that maximum people has achieved this increament then it would stregthen the argument. Along with with, if how many people prefer airline over other transport & how many people wanted to go foriegn country in their vacation can be known then it would help to clear the vague view of the argument & perhaps a major number of percentage choosing these two facts would be convival for the argument to have a more concrete ground.
In summary, the argument can be considered unsubstantiated as it stands with such porous evidences. To bolster it further, it is needed to have survey among the populations to determine te exact amount of number of people who are used as the evidence of the conclusion of the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 562 350
No. of Characters: 2745 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.869 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.884 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.512 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 152 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.48 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.37 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
...ars. To justify his statement, he notes several evidence like the peoples incomes are enhancing ...
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Line 5, column 664, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... restrained from the salary increament. If these facts have become true then the a...
^^
Line 9, column 251, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...judged. He also cites that this increase vacation time is only for the employees ...
^^
Line 9, column 365, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...t what percentage of the country people who are job holders. If the maximum people are ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 386, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the country people who are job holders. If the maximum people are not job holders ...
^^
Line 9, column 650, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'state'
Suggestion: state
...e peoples of the country but he did not stated how that was determined. It might be ha...
^^^^^^
Line 15, column 80, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e of the country to determining whether all of the class people has faced salary & vacatio...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 163, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vacation increament or not, can help the argument to be more cleared. If the resu...
^^
Line 15, column 194, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... help the argument to be more cleared. If the results of the survey come out that...
^^
Line 15, column 325, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: with
... it would stregthen the argument. Along with with, if how many people prefer airline over...
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Line 21, column 145, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'surveyed'.
Suggestion: surveyed
...olster it further, it is needed to have survey among the populations to determine te e...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, so, then, therefore, for example, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2836.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 562.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0462633452 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62779714474 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414590747331 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 893.7 705.55239521 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7321539525 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.44 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.48 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197669452137 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701808574145 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849366102452 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120173213947 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876733089602 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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