Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
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This topic raises the controversial issue of whether using modern technology in school augmenting their learning or distract from their orginal prespective of learning.Indisputably, The motive of the schools to use such modern technologies in order to faclilate the methods of learning is inviolable.Nevertheless, it can also capable to diverge the mind of the students from study.However, diverging from study is actually depending on the student ,more specifically it judges how incensed the student is with his study & it also can't be a such strong reason to ostracized the students with ancient methods of studies where the world is getting modern day by day.
First of all, The modern technology like video , computers & internet make the people's life more easier with all of point of view.The academic side of education is benifitted with this as it open a new method of teaching.To become more crystalize it can be say that, the schools are using the computer & internet to instruct their students by recording the teacher's lecture thorugh the video camera. To illustrate ,let us look at the example of an online based academic tutoring service MAGOOSH. MAGOOSH is a online based GRE teaching school of USA which is colosally famous among the students of all over the world. Stdents from different countires are enjoying their video lectures & doing the quizes with excitements. This is not the only example of using modern technology in teaching , if we look out more broadly than we can see that every graduate school of USA including MIT is now using this modern techonlogy to teach their international students with basic courses before joining.Because they think certainly this is useful to the students. Consequently , this is pretty obvious that modern technolgy is a boon for academic learning.
Furtermore,if we talk about the distraction which is certainly cause because of the internet, it is actually depend on the studnet motive.Specifically, if the student is an avid learner than nothing can distract him from studying. For instance, in Bangladesh some public university is currently making some tutotial lectures for their students who are sick & could not attend the classes but want to give the final exam.By seeing that lectures the sick students also obtained good scores, nothing can distract themselves from the online lectures before the exams as they are keen to do the study. From this both common sense & personal experience have told us that , it is not the technology who distract the studnets rather it is the shaking mind of the students.
Admittedly , this distraction is happening oftenly among the students but this can not be major cause to neglect modern technolgies. This is true especially when it comes to see the modern wolrd conditon.As The modern world is compact now with full of technologies, if the students are not cope with this form early age then it will be tough for them in the long run. In addition, if the students are confined among their ancestor time study materials then that will hobble their pace of going forward.Hence the avobe argument does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that these technolgy is not useful for the learning of the students.
In colclusion ,although diverging happening often in using technology in school,it is also cardinal to use it for bolster the method of learing in this modern world. As long as some measurement are performed or some areas involved, with the effecitvenes of it schools have to offer it to the studnets.In fact, it is not the need ,it is neccessity for the modern academic.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, then, for instance, in addition, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3007.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 590.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09661016949 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99574681226 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476271186441 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 930.6 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 23.0359550562 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 149.12092036 60.3974514979 247% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 200.466666667 118.986275619 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.3333333333 23.4991977007 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.21951772744 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 47.0 7.80617977528 602% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170490366399 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660144111036 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374425614403 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103873612365 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273775856843 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.3 14.1392134831 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.89 48.8420337079 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 12.1743820225 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 11.8971910112 496% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.2143820225 157% => OK
text_standard: 59.0 11.7820224719 501% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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