“According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.”
The director claims here the resolution of the fewer viewer of the super screen movie can be solved by advertising.Narrated in this way the autor disootrts the view of the situation by providing ill & weak reasoning. In support of the recommendation the author reasons that thogh the viewrs are curtailed this year but the positive review has increased . For this reason, he thought it may be happened because that positive reviews do not reach to public & it can be solved by advertising. However, careful scrutiny view of the evidence reveals that it gives little credible support to the authors recommendation. Hence , the argument can be considered unsubstantiated.
Firstly, the author readily assumes here that the people who attended the siper super screen produced movie are the only viewrs of that movies. It's a merley an assumption without much solid ground.Because what if it can happened that some people glean the movies in a illegal way than they saw it & gave some postive review? Also there is no clear mathmatical numbers viewers who attendaed in the supers screen movies. What if the people decreased but that are not much as the percentage is not specific here.So without giving a articulate view of this situation the assumptions is quite impragmatic.
Again, the author merely cites that their movies qualtiy is not bad. How can be he sure about that only by reading positive reviews? For example, what if the movies made by the Company previous year is not much more entertaining to faamliy people yet they did not give a review & this year they did not come because they thought it will be another bad movie? In additon, the author here again did not mention about the review percentage increase how much. Without knowing this factor the assumption is can have it's ground.
Finally, The fails to focus on major factor while giving the solution of advertising. Advertising of any movie is costly process & as the company as already in loss position because of the reduced viewers from where that additional money come?Greater share budget for advertising may cause to reduce the movie budget.What willl happened if that costly plan fails? Without giving answer to this question the reader left with an assumption that the claims made by the author are more a wishful thinker rather than a substantive evidence.
In epilogue, the argument is unpersuasive as it satnds. To bolster it further , the author must provide some more concrete evidence .Perhaps by the way of giving necesary information about the percentage decreased number or budget allocation source.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2108 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.891 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.534 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.684 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.192 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Narrated
...reen movie can be solved by advertising.Narrated in this way the autor disootrts the vie...
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Line 1, column 343, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed this year but the positive review has increased . For this reason, he though...
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Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r but the positive review has increased . For this reason, he thought it may be...
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Line 1, column 365, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ositive review has increased . For this reason, he thought it may be happened b...
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Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eview has increased . For this reason, he thought it may be happened because th...
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Line 1, column 594, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...it gives little credible support to the authors recommendation. Hence , the argument ca...
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Line 1, column 623, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ort to the authors recommendation. Hence , the argument can be considered unsubsta...
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Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ssumes here that the people who attended the siper super screen produced movie a...
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Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ple who attended the siper super screen produced movie are the only viewrs of th...
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Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...vie are the only viewrs of that movies. Its a merley an assumption without much sol...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Because
...an assumption without much solid ground.Because what if it can happened that some peo...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ithout much solid ground.Because what if it can happened that some people glean t...
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Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'happen'
Suggestion: happen
...h solid ground.Because what if it can happened that some people glean the movies in a ...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a illegal way" with adverb for "illegal"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...pened that some people glean the movies in a illegal way than they saw it & gave some postive re...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ed that some people glean the movies in a illegal way than they saw it & gave som...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...they saw it & gave some postive review? Also there is no clear mathmatical numbers v...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
... as the percentage is not specific here.So without giving a articulate view of th...
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Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... is not specific here.So without giving a articulate view of this situation the ...
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Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ific here.So without giving a articulate view of this situation the assumptions i...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iew of this situation the assumptions is quite impragmatic. Again, the autho...
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Suggestion:
...this situation the assumptions is quite impragmatic. Again, the author merel...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g positive reviews? For example, what if the movies made by the Company previous...
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Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...example, what if the movies made by the Company previous year is not much more e...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hor here again did not mention about the review percentage increase how much. Wit...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Greater
...s from where that additional money come?Greater share budget for advertising may cause...
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Line 7, column 284, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Greater share budget for advertising may cause to reduce the movie budget.What w...
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Line 7, column 292, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reducing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: reducing
...share budget for advertising may cause to reduce the movie budget.What willl happened if...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...are budget for advertising may cause to reduce the movie budget.What willl happe...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: What
... may cause to reduce the movie budget.What willl happened if that costly plan fail...
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Line 7, column 374, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pened if that costly plan fails? Without giving answer to this question the reade...
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Line 7, column 481, Rule ID: MORE_A_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a more wishful'?
Suggestion: a more wishful
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Line 7, column 517, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Line 10, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sive as it satnds. To bolster it further , the author must provide some more concr...
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Line 10, column 132, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...must provide some more concrete evidence .Perhaps by the way of giving necesary i...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Perhaps
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...concrete evidence .Perhaps by the way of giving necesary information about the pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for example, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2188.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13615023474 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79510467849 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2698604203 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.157894737 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 36.0 5.25449101796 685% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269314332555 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760180855935 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656566382566 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140049701199 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737161224031 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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