A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
In the context, the author concludes that seeing the dentist regularly doesn't help to prevent the tooth decay of a person. To supplemental his logics behind the conclusion, he provides evidence by comparing the Himalayan mountain region childs & the U.S.A suburban childs. He cites that as the U.S.A childs did not get any improvement for tooth decay after consulting the doctor while the Nepal childs have less without seeing the doctor, it could be proven that the doctors dont play any major role. However, intensive scrutiny view of his evidence telltalling that there is copius amount of loopholes in the evidence which has made the argument unwarranted. Therefore, the argument can be considered as unpersuasive currently.
Firstly, the author is equivocal about the method of the U.S.A childs that how they care about thier tooths. It might be happened that they just went through to the doctor but did not maintain the prescribed medic the doctor told them. It also could be the cause that either the toothpaste they use is not good one or they did not follow their doctor's instructions.Besides this, the author is not mentioned the actual number that how many people went to the dentist. It might be happened that a short percentage of them went 1.25 times to the doctor & other did not care about it. Hence , without having this clarification the argument is quite vague.
Additionally, the author agian is not clear the specific amount of number that how many childs are facing less tooth decay in Nepal than U.S.A. It might be happen that the less amount is nearly amount less than 10 which is not a big issue. Another fact is about the enviroment & the eating chart of the two regions people. The author did not state anything about this though it is a major issue. For example, it might be happened that U.S.A people ate more meat than Nepal people so they need more tooth care which they are not concern about. On the other hand it could also be happened that the enviroment has impact on the tooth. So this facts need to be cleared before givnig the statement.
Lastly, a complete survey on the people who maintain doctor's instructions yet they faced tooth decay would help to reinforce the argument. Another important survey need to be conduct that about what percentage the tooth decay is less in the Nepal. If this data is available it will be convival to judge the argument & if the differnce percentage is huge it would strength the argument to the author side.
In summary, the argument is unsubstantiated as it stands with this porous evidences.To butress it further, the author must provide comcrete evidence perhaps by conducting a survey on the U.S.A people or comparing the number of that two region.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2204 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.582 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.463 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.002 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ludes that seeing the dentist regularly doesnt help to prevent the tooth decay of a pe...
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Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...alayan mountain region childs & the U.S.A suburban childs. He cites that as the U...
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Line 1, column 299, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...burban childs. He cites that as the U.S.A childs did not get any improvement for ...
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Line 1, column 476, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...or, it could be proven that the doctors dont play any major role. However, intensive...
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Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...s equivocal about the method of the U.S.A childs that how they care about thier t...
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Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
...d not follow their doctors instructions.Besides this, the author is not mentioned the a...
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Line 5, column 587, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tor & other did not care about it. Hence , without having this clarification the a...
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Line 9, column 84, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun childs seems to be countable; consider using: 'many '.
Suggestion: many
... the specific amount of number that how many childs are facing less tooth decay in Nepal th...
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Line 9, column 195, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'amounted'.
Suggestion: amounted
...e happen that the less amount is nearly amount less than 10 which is not a big issue. ...
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Line 9, column 440, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
... example, it might be happened that U.S.A people ate more meat than Nepal people ...
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Line 9, column 636, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... enviroment has impact on the tooth. So this facts need to be cleared before givnig ...
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Line 13, column 318, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will be convival to judge the argument & if the differnce percentage is huge it w...
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Line 17, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...as it stands with this porous evidences.To butress it further, the author must pro...
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Line 17, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ress it further, the author must provide comcrete evidence perhaps by conducting ...
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Line 17, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...rhaps by conducting a survey on the U.S.A people or comparing the number of that ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, so, therefore, while, for example, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87366167024 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56165008046 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456102783726 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8326032615 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.8 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.35 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130552350966 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427538992633 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447820919966 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0767692371541 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418222078101 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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