"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. Opponents note that last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Their suggested alternative proposal is adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, it is argued, thereby reducing rush-hour traffic."
In the editorial of local newspaper, it is stated that the opponents of the motorist's lobby plan to add another lane of Blue Highway have advocated that a bicycle lane be constructed to alleviate the highway’s traffic issues. The opponent has come to this conclusion based on the issues faced by Green Highway last year as well as the keen interest in bicycling of the areas local residents. Before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, however, these three question must be answered.
First of all, are Green Highway and Blue Highway roughly comparable? In other words, can circumstances from one highway be used to make generalizations and predictions about the other? It is possible that the Green Highway and Blue Highway are not similar at all- perhaps Green Highway runs through residential neighborhoods, where the Blue Highway is located mostly in rural, unpopulated section of the city. Further, there is a possibility the quality of the highway is markedly different, with Green Highway’s road falling apart and Blue Highway in pristine condition. If either of these scenarios has merit, then condition drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, do a majority of a majority of the area resident in biking live within biking distance of their place of employment? The opponents in the arguments prematurely assumes that many of the residents in the will bike to work in the morning rather than drives their cars. However, this might not be the case. Perhaps the average distance from home to work is over 15 miles, and that’s why many of the residents are essentially obligated to take the highway – even if they don’t want to. In an ideal world, they might choose to bike to work, but in reality is such that they cannot do so due to the logistics of their situations, then only one form of transportation (the car via the highway) is possible. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold true.
Finally, are the last year’s issues of exacerbated traffic condition faced by the Green Highway still existing? The opponent unwarrantedly assumes that the last year’s issues of worsened traffic faced by the Green Highway due to constructing motorist lobby to widening the highway still exist in the way they were in the previous year. However, this might not be the case. There may be the possibility that the previous year issues has been solved and the traffic issues of the previous year no long exist in Green Highway. Further, there is a possibility that stringent traffic laws to control jam in Green Highway might have been implemented this year which has ameliorated the traffic problems. If the scenarios above is true, then the argument made is by opponent is weakened.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer three questions above and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to add a bike take to Blue Highway.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 524 350
No. of Characters: 2534 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.784 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.836 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.72 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.899 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.773 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'circumstance'
Suggestion: circumstance
...roughly comparable? In other words, can circumstances from one highway be used to make genera...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2630.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 524.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01908396947 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8735940107 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458015267176 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.832668373 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.545454545 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13636363636 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198410405815 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623900556197 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637816208945 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113993382279 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048371066179 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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