The auther claims that ' teachers in his high Schools should assign homework no more than twice a week. To support the conclusion, he cites various evidences found in a survey of of high school math and science teachers. Although these evidences appear to bolster the conclusion, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. So, in order to make the argument more sound, the auther needs to cite the following specific evidences
1) The student quality in Marlee high school.
Firstly, the author has not presented the student quality in Marlee high school. This is possible that while talking students in Marlee high school, they take students by taking entrance exam and they only select highly creative students only. In such case, the writer's assertion cannot be made. If Snlee high school take students of any level of skills , then certainly, the number of students who get high grade would be less.
2)The teacher's quality in Sanlee high school.
The writer has not presented the teacher's quality in Sanlee high school, what if the the teacher's quality in Sanlee high school is relatively low as it in Marlee high school, if so ,then despite assigning homework no more than twice a week, they should focus on improving teacher's quality.
3) Thirdly, the creditibility of the survey conducted, what it the survey was conducted in a certain region only?, in such case we cannot come into the conclusion jusy only be assuming the fact as ubiquitous fact, isn' t it ? If so then this could weaken the writer's claim.
In sum, the writer needs to cite the especific evidences such student's quality in Marlee high schook, the teacher's quality in Sanlee high school, and the creditibility of the survey, without these especific evidences, I cannot convince with the writer's contention.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 297 350
No. of Characters: 1445 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.865 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.47 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.079 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The auther claims that teachers in his high School...
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Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The auther claims that teachers in his high Schools should assi...
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Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...tes various evidences found in a survey of of high school math and science teachers. ...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hers. Although these evidences appear to bolster the conclusion, a meticulous ana...
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Line 2, column 25, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ific evidences 1 The student quality in Marlee high school. Firstly, the author...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...eative students only. In such case, the writers assertion cannot be made. If Snlee high...
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ool take students of any level of skills , then certainly, the number of students ...
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Line 6, column 82, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... quality in Sanlee high school, what if the the teachers quality in Sanlee high school ...
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Line 6, column 82, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... quality in Sanlee high school, what if the the teachers quality in Sanlee high school ...
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Line 6, column 181, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y low as it in Marlee high school, if so ,then despite assigning homework no more ...
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Line 8, column 225, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the fact as ubiquitous fact, isn t it ? If so then this could weaken the writers c...
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Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...c evidences, I cannot convince with the writers contention.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, then, third, thirdly, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01683501684 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51765058052 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511784511785 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.2802477118 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.615384615 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269475251529 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109035293611 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970625793224 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159495930199 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913805096448 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 98.500998004 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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