"Despite its downtown location, the Rialto Movie Theater, a local institution for five decades, must make big changes or close its doors forever. It should follow the example of the new Apex Theater in the mall outside of town. When the Apex opened last year, it featured a video arcade, plush carpeting and seats, and a state-of-the-art sound system. Furthermore, in a recent survey, over 85 percent of respondents reported that the high price of newly released movies prevents them from going to the movies more than five times per year. Thus, if the Rialto intends to hold on to its share of a decreasing pool of moviegoers, it must offer the same features as Apex."
In the above statement, author conceded that the Rialto Movie Theater, a local institution for five decades, must make big changes or close its doors forever. Author came into such conclusion because of decreasing pool of moviegoers in the theater and he also compared the features of Rialto Movie Theater with newly opened theater Apex where a video arcade, plush carpeting and seats, and a state-of-the-art sound system have been provided. So, it is the conclusion from the author that if Rialto Movie Theater wants to increase the share of moviegoers they need to offer same features of the Apex. Before this decision has been hastily concluded there are some questions that should be answered to make this argument unflawed.
First of all, author didn’t present any specific data about the percent of moviegoers that used to go to the Apex and may be the number moviegoers in this theater less than the Rialto Theater. Again, there is no specific evident that the percent of moviegoers in the Apex Theater has been increased many times due to its upgraded features. That’s why it is unseemly to follow the Apex theater without having enough evident.
Secondly, author didn’t provide any information about the price of the ticket of Apex theater which may be higher than the price of the Rialto Theater since it provides much updated feature than the Rialto Theater. From the mentioned data in statement it is lucid that moviegoers are discouraged to go the theater more than the five times because of high pricing of tickets. If the price of the ticket of Apex theater is more than the Rialto theater then the argument can’t hold the water anymore.
Finally, according to statement, aforementioned, there is no complaint from the moviegoers regarding the facilities available in the Rialto Movie Theater. If Rialto Just follow Apex Theater and update facilities they may need to increase the ticket price to cope with the cost which may lead to further decrease in ticket price and decrease in share of moviegoers.
In conclusion, from the above analysis it is unambiguous that the conclusion has been drawn without considering these above factors and that’s why the argument is flawed
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1793 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.859 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.46 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.307 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.442 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.685 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... conceded that the Rialto Movie Theater, a local institution for five decades, mu...
^^
Line 1, column 602, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eed to offer same features of the Apex. Before this decision has been hastily conclude...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 698, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e some questions that should be answered to make this argument unflawed. First...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10655737705 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65110825671 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453551912568 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.9863381882 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.769230769 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1538461538 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323475827723 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137943431664 0.0743258471296 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113136823689 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170351410598 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116692095999 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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