Dr.Carp, An anthropologist
In the article, Dr. Carp claims that the observation done by a noted anthropologist Dr. Field about the children island Tertia 20 years ago is invalid as the results from his interview based cultural study give different scenario. However, the statement made by the author has major concerns as it is based on assumptions that do not have any validity.
Firstly, the observation by Dr. Field happened 20 years ago which might be correct considering the time zone. Dr. Carp’s interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia happened recently that has nothing to be compared with an observation happening 20 years back.
Secondly, the author’s interviews included children from not only the island Tertia but also from some other island which make the scenario not actually based on the particular island Tertia. It is very possible that children living in Tertia are still reared by not just their biological parents but also by the villagers of the island. May be they were very few in number than the amount of children from other islands who are perhaps reared by their biological parents. In addition, there is a possibility that the children who were interviewed by the author were mostly from other islands than Tertia.
Finally, observation centered cultural study might not be invalid as the author claims as the observation is done by reviewing a wide variety of people who belong to that particular region while interview based cultural study might have major fallacies as very few people would attain the interview process as most of the village people are too shy to participate in interviews. Moreover,The author claims that the interview centered method that his team of graduate students currently using in Tertia would establish more accurate understanding of cultural tradition might be wrong. It is very possible that students who will conduct the interview process among the villagers of the island may fail to bring the actual scenario as many of them perhaps would be less interested in digging into the cultural tradition of the villagers. They might not give enough time and effort to make the actual scenario which would lead the method an invalid one.
In conclusion, unless the author makes proper answers of the above mentioned fallacies, there is no way to rely on his claim. He must dig into the scenarios mentioned above and make enough evidences to justify his claim as a valid prediction.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 2016 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.953 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.54 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.386 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.662 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 344, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...ut also by the villagers of the island. May be they were very few in number than the a...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: few
...rs of the island. May be they were very few in number than the amount of children from other ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: FEW_IN_NUMBER[1]
Message: Use simply 'few'.
Suggestion: few
...rs of the island. May be they were very few in number than the amount of children from other ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 388, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...y to participate in interviews. Moreover,The author claims that the interview center...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09113300493 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65509587065 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450738916256 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0531620629 57.8364921388 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.642857143 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 5.70786347227 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1079533158 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410328727922 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766623810121 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786942293343 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891824327281 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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