"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
With the information provided, this assumption leading to conclusion remains unfounded. This argument is well presented yet far- fetched. The author of the statement claims that for increasing worker's efficiency, we ought to implement electronic monitoring of employee' Internet in the setting of workstation. Hence the conclusion is ill-founded.
The primary assumptions underlying that the author's assumption is that provided that we are to decrease the number of hour on personal activity such as playing or chatting the productivity would increase without a shadow of doubt. Nevertheless, he fails to preclude other possible reason into account that this approach is not a superb solution due to the fact that a modicum of refreshment is vital and mandatory in the work. As a matter of fact, we all know that everyone needs to fresh spirit in their work. In fact, as long as we reduce some activity such as shopping or playing game during our duty definitely our efficiency would decline as soon as possible. Want of such prudent answers to make a conclusion full of holes. So, to reinforce the argument the author should have discussed about installing software to detect employee's performance is not worthwhile.
Furthermore, the author of the statement avers that as long as we install this tools undoubtedly productivity will increase. Without considering and ruling other approach that employee seek other alternative amusement for refreshing such as using their mobile, Pad, Smartphone for connecting net. Indeed, putting this system is not useful.
Moreover, the author of the statement assumes that for fostering a better work ethic this system is a sole solution for augmenting profit. Nonetheless, he fails to take other possible method for this challenge which is considerably more effect without a shadow of doubt. One of the most striking solution for increasing profit is corresponds that degree of being diligent and accurate which is highly imperative. In fact, there is a considerable number of worker that they have a considerable amount concentration when work or shopping in the Internet owing to their mind can act both task with highest accuracy. So, to reinforce the argument the author should have discussed about other solution for this matter which could be useful.
In short, as discussed, this conclusion cannot be tenable. The author of the statement should have discussed about a modicum of amount of refreshments during work is essential. Besides, worker find another manner for refreshing their mind such as mobile for connecting to the Internet. On the other hand to make a rigid conclusion is very myopic observation method. After all, feckless attempt with a fallible method could be noting but a fool's errand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...he statement claims that for increasing workers efficiency, we ought to implement elect...
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Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...Internet in the setting of workstation. Hence the conclusion is ill-founded. The p...
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Line 3, column 45, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...primary assumptions underlying that the authors assumption is that provided that we are...
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Line 7, column 357, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing profit is corresponds that degree of being diligent and accurate which is hig...
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Line 7, column 592, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
...t owing to their mind can act both task with highest accuracy. So, to reinforce the argument...
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Line 9, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bout a modicum of amount of refreshments during work is essential. Besides, worke...
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Line 9, column 441, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fools'' or 'fool's'?
Suggestion: fools'; fool's
...a fallible method could be noting but a fools errand.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, hence, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, well, while, after all, in fact, in short, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 440.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.275 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89354421782 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497727272727 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.9253863413 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.913043478 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1304347826 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17391304348 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135073269294 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384415854969 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497286306566 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867955373015 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294959981588 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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