In an effort to improve our employees productivity we should implement electronic monitoring of employees Internet use from their workstations Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce th | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."

In the recommendation sent by the vice president of human resources at Climpson to the company's president, it is stated that, electronic monitoring of Internet use of the employees should be implemented in order to ameliorate the prolific of employees, and to do so the software is install on the each and every computer to detect the use of internet, so that the company will keep eye on the each and every employees and the employees who are spending more time on personal activity like playing game, shopping and using social media at work hours instead of working will be punished, and this will improves overall profit for company. The upcoming paragraph will throw light on my personal opinion with a suitable epitome.

I am in disaccord with the statement that the company's needs to keep eye on the employees internet usage. There are numerous reasons why I am not in the favor of given statement, the first and the foremost one is that the employees who are working very efficiently and giving there best at work they will feel abysmal , after giving there best they are receiving this kind of behavior's in back, and it may happen that they will change there job as well because they are not feeling comfortable with this kind of environment. This will result in the loss for the company to loss the ingenuous employee who is very prolific at work. To epitome, in the year 2010, the was one company who’s name is InfoTech, which is an software company they try to monitor there employees by electronic monitoring on employees computer and try to gain profit with it but, instead it leads to 20% of loss at that time to the company, because of the company try to monitor each and every work and the employees are not feeling comfortable, so the leave there job and join the other company.

I would like to add few more reasons to explain my point of further the company put electronic monitoring on their employees, the company needs to hire one small team for monitoring the internet use, also the company needs to pay for monitoring team, and also who will keep eye on each and every employees of the company, they might waste there time on the internet like shopping and playing games and not doing there work properly, they feel like they are the superior and they can do whatever the want to do and thus the hope of the company for fostering better work ethic would be destroyed.

To conclude, I would like to suggest to the company that they have to provide a pleasant environment to the employees who are working over there rather than putting restriction or supervision on them, once they feel comfortable then they work even more better which leads to profit for the company, and also the company should follow certain types of reward policies, like if a person works for like 12 hours a day, everyday for 1 month, he will be rewarded with bonus or something, this would lead to employees being more focused on their work rather than wasting their time around, in the greed for bonus.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'installed'.
Suggestion: installed
...employees, and to do so the software is install on the each and every computer to detec...
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Line 1, column 601, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'improve'
Suggestion: improve
...working will be punished, and this will improves overall profit for company. The upcomin...
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Line 1, column 684, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...coming paragraph will throw light on my personal opinion with a suitable epitome. I am in dis...
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Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...t the companys needs to keep eye on the employees internet usage. There are numerous reas...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...here best at work they will feel abysmal , after giving there best they are receiv...
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Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: WHOS[3]
Message: Did you mean 'whose'?
Suggestion: whose
..., in the year 2010, the was one company who’s name is InfoTech, which is an software ...
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Line 3, column 682, Rule ID: WHOS_ACTUAL[6]
Message: Did you mean 'whose'?
Suggestion: whose
..., in the year 2010, the was one company who’s name is InfoTech, which is an software ...
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Line 3, column 715, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ompany who’s name is InfoTech, which is an software company they try to monitor th...
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Line 3, column 799, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...e employees by electronic monitoring on employees computer and try to gain profit with it...
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Line 7, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s who are working over there rather than putting restriction or supervision on th...
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Line 7, column 250, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ey feel comfortable then they work even more better which leads to profit for the company, ...
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Line 7, column 418, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...a person works for like 12 hours a day, everyday for 1 month, he will be rewarded with b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, thus, well, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 55.5748502994 144% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 532.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66353383459 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46569199519 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40977443609 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 66.0 22.8473053892 289% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 225.050792878 57.8364921388 389% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 310.125 119.503703932 260% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.5 23.324526521 285% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208222532656 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111103791235 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698413724196 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150718896524 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423397290846 0.0628817314937 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.8 14.3799401198 235% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.95 48.3550499002 27% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.9 12.197005988 229% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.64 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 12.3882235529 460% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.4 11.1389221557 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.9071856287 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, thus, well, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments