In an effort to improve our employees productivity we should implement electronic monitoring of employees Internet use from their workstations Employees who use the Internet inappropriately from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet inappropriately from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. Installing software on company computers to detect employees' Internet use is the best way to prevent employees from wasting time on the job. It will foster a better work ethic at Climpson and improve our overall profits

The author in the passage concludes that usage of Internet is the major reason that lowers the productivity of employees. He even states that Climpson should monitor the Internet usage by installing software on companies computers and should punish those who uses Internet inappropriately from their workstations. This includes hours spent on personal or recreational activities such as shopping or playing games etc. Thus, to foster better work ethic at Climpson and improve their overall profits, tracking each employees Internet usage is the best way. Even though, the author has provided quite convincing evidences, there are many asssumptions or technicalities that the author has not coveres and are potential flaws that, if true, weaken the authors argument and in turn the conclusion.

To begin with, the author assumes that employees spend myriad hours in personal or reacreational activities viz shopping and games. However, this might be entirely false. A person might be surfing the net to look for ways in which the profit of a company can be increased. He or she might actually want to make the company prosper and hence is watching youtube videos about ted talk that is germane to their company's motto. Even if he or she is spending time in playing games or other activities, the company can not just punish that person without being fully informed about the reason as to why he was doing so. It is a probable scenario that he had completed all the pending work that was assigned to him. He could have gone home but as a responsible employee he waiting until when everyone was leaving. He was waiting in case some work comes up. These possible cases weaken the author's argument and hence the company should not rely solely on the data collected by tracking internet usage.

In addition, it is not wise to just track the internet usage. If the company is adamant in tracking the usage, it should also track where is it being used There are many probable scenarios like the one stated above that they are actually doing some productive research on the internet. If the company punished such employees then that might result in that employee leaving the job because of negative work environment.

Furthermore, the hidden technicalities that might be faced during the implementation of a such an idea is also not covered in the passage stated above. To track the internet usage and to store the data for thousands of emplyees is not an easy task to achieve. In fact, the company can not infer anything about the data usage in a small amount of time like a day or a week. It has to store data for months to get useful inference. Hence to manage that much data, they might have to employ more people. Hence, instead of improving profits, it is possible that the complany would incur loss. Thus, all the scenarious mist be considered before stating a conclusion.

Lastly, there might be many more cases which undermine the author's argument. This might include the privacy issues. Thus, a company should always consider all the case scenarios before concluding a final judgement. Thus, all the above points stated undermine the conclusion presented in the passage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, look, so, then, thus, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2648.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 536.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94029850746 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5994048876 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 204.123752495 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481343283582 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 837.0 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.4397805245 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5714285714 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82142857143 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20722442945 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520544208896 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645633221161 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121277317203 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772189862817 0.0628817314937 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, look, so, then, thus, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments