According to the passage, the government should aggrandize the budget in this year's budget for riverside recreational facility because the use of the river for water sport is expected to increase. To support this claims, the argument suggests the result of the survey, which mentions that the favorite recreational activities is water sports, and the recent projected plan to clean up Manson River. However, the claims are based on the assumptions which may not be true. Therefore, the argument is not granted.
First, the writer assumes that the survey and the result of the survey are reliable. But it is not assured that the survey is representative for the opinions of the resident people. Because the writer does not suggest any standards used to select the people surveyed. Moreover, even though the people who are surveyed represent the opinions of the residents, it is not clear that the answers is well organized. Due to the fact that the exact questions are not known, it is dubious whether the answers are manipulated cleverly with the questions that favoring to the certain results. And Although the answers of the survey are reliable, the results do not direct mean that the residents wish to enjoy the water sports on the river. Because it is possible that they prefer to playing inside of the center rather than outside water sports.
Second, the writer assumes that cleaning up the river will be beneficial for the increase of the water sports on the river. However, the plans to clean up the river do not guarantee the increase of the demand of the water sports on the river. Because the reason why the plans were made was to respond to the complaints of the smell from the river rather than demanding places to play water sports. Even though the river will be clean enough, people may not want to enjoy water sport there with several reasons. For example, people may feel uncomfortable to wear water sports clothes near their places because they can encounter many neighbors so that they will not wish to go to the river. Or because of the past dirty image, people may hesitate to go swimming to the river.
All in all, even though the author hastily assumes several things to support the main points, due to the lack of the reliability of the assumptions, the arguments becomes less plausible. To strengthen the idea, the writer need to suggest further explanation to assure the assumptions. For example, the reasons to increase the reliability of the survey are needed. And the reasons to think the cleaning up the river leads to the increase of the demand of the water sports on the river are required.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2129 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.721 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.392 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.476 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.333 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...or the opinions of the resident people. Because the writer does not suggest any standar...
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Line 3, column 732, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to enjoy the water sports on the river. Because it is possible that they prefer to play...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: PREFER_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'play'?
Suggestion: play
...ause it is possible that they prefer to playing inside of the center rather than outsid...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hesitate to go swimming to the river. All in all, even though the author hasti...
^^^^
Line 7, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o increase the reliability of the survey are needed. And the reasons to think the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83813747228 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48140760262 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421286031042 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.05114529 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.904761905 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4761904762 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176922266063 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594334096281 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453821693006 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113432320961 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030166119016 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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