Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall stu

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The claim offered seems to be eloquent at first glance, but on close examination, it has some logical fallacies which lead to a wrong judgement to the evaluation program of(to) faculties in Omega University. And the decision to terminate the evaluation program may not bring desirable results.

Firstly, the author did not mention the percentage of the students participate in the program every year. If there’re only a small proportion of students who give their evaluation regularly, terminating the program could not have a significant impact on the overall grades inflation trend.

Secondly, the author linked the grades inflation with the implementation of evaluation procedure, but it is entirely possible that Omega University attracted top students from high school at the cost of higher scholars since 15 years ago. Or the university upgraded its facilities and introduced more professional teacher to provide the students with better learning environment. All the actions listed above could result in the better performance of students. Therefore, the grades inflation may only be a coincidence that after the beginning of evaluation procedure.

Finally, even if the grades increase has a strong relationship with the evaluation program, the author fails to take other possible explanations, such as students’ lack of job training, into consideration. Students without proper job training may not master the skills in the interviews, which could affect their performance in the job market. Moreover, students in Omega university may pursue their degrees in more theoretical fields like physics and math, which there’re less job opportunities for them to choose, thereby resulting the inferior performance in finding a job compared to students of Alpha university. Thus, the evaluation program should not be over criticised before more evidences are presented to articulate the real causes of the less interest employers have on students in Omega university.

In sum, more information and investigation should be conducted to better understand the initial situation, including admission standards, facilities and faculties status, etc, the university first launched the evaluation program. In this way, we are able to reach at a conclusion about whether it is useful to stop the evaluation program in order to empower students to get a better job.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'grades'' or 'grade's'?
Suggestion: grades'; grade's
...ave a significant impact on the overall grades inflation trend. Secondly, the autho...
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Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'grades'' or 'grade's'?
Suggestion: grades'; grade's
...end. Secondly, the author linked the grades inflation with the implementation of ev...
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Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'grades'' or 'grade's'?
Suggestion: grades'; grade's
...performance of students. Therefore, the grades inflation may only be a coincidence tha...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.295843520782 0.25644967241 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.119804400978 0.15541462614 77% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0831295843521 0.0836205057962 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0562347188264 0.0520304965353 108% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0220048899756 0.0272364105082 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107579462103 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0195599022005 0.0416121511921 47% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.10588158372 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0342298288509 0.026700313972 128% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.110024449878 0.113004496875 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0220048899756 0.0255425247493 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0122249388753 0.0127820249294 96% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2377.0 2731.13054187 87% => OK
No of words: 362.0 446.07635468 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.56629834254 6.12365571057 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.436464088398 0.378187486979 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.353591160221 0.287650121315 123% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.28453038674 0.208842608468 136% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.207182320442 0.135150697306 153% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10588158372 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 207.018472906 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549723756906 0.469332199767 117% => OK
Word variations: 60.9113549199 52.1807786196 117% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 25.8571428571 23.2022227129 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2018339484 57.7814097925 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.785714286 141.986410481 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 23.2022227129 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.928571428571 0.724660767414 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 61.2162588792 51.9672348444 118% => OK
Elegance: 2.13580246914 1.8405768891 116% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321816093722 0.441005458295 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.148482380092 0.135418324435 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.051980832164 0.0829849096947 63% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.683709520353 0.58762219726 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0937995878426 0.147661913831 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151849967824 0.193483328276 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394815863201 0.0970749176394 41% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.417907898967 0.42659136922 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0789906282486 0.0774707102158 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212375795378 0.312017818177 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460702316099 0.0698173142475 66% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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