Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons.Primarily the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that decrease in the number of jobs secured by graduates from omega university is mainly because of students evaluating professors.
The argument fails to provide a strong reason why the grades of the students have gone up by 30% after the implementation of new evaluation procedure.It does mention that teachers are giving good grades to students so that they get a goo feedback from their side but there might be other reasons as well.As this was implemented 15 years ago , the new generation of students joining in the university might have a better intelligent quotient or the curriculum is not competent enough.The reason also might be that the teachers are sharing the important questions with the students or the exams are not being conducted with a proper decorum. Hence the school might analyse all the factors and should observe how the students are performing during the lectures and whether any change is to be brought in the syllabus material which wiil be relevant to todays market.
The argument also says that the students in Alpha university are faring better than Omega when it comes to getting jobs.But it only considers one factor and overlooks the others which assess why students are getting jobs.Alpha university might have a different curriculum which is relevant to the current market .The students in the universiyt might be more intelligent and harworking when compared to Omega.The location of the university also plays an important role in their students getting placed in companies.Hence the placement officials of the University must enquire and juxtapose the above mentioned criteria of the two universities and then come to a conclusion.This will surely enlighten them to what extent the evaluation methods are affecting the jobs of the students.
The argument should also consider the duration of 15 years which brings a significant change in the job market.Every University is famous for one of the subjects and the students usually get jobs based on that.Hence the university should make a check on the current trends in the market and revise their syllabus per that.This will attract the employers who would prefer a industry ready graduate and this might help the university get back their lost glory.
Therefore all these factors play a major role in determining how well a college is in helping their students get jobs.The argument only considers one factor which is the students evaluating the teachers and hence should take a holistic approach while making a decision as it affects a lot of lives.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 445 350
No. of Characters: 2197 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.593 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.937 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.618 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.321 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.478 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.794 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21296296296 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85575695401 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502314814815 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 72.0 22.8473053892 315% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 208.778524332 57.8364921388 361% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 375.333333333 119.503703932 314% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 72.0 23.324526521 309% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.25449101796 609% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218841733292 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112544059406 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459777070408 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125132702387 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283198186712 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.1 14.3799401198 272% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -1.6 48.3550499002 -3% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 12.197005988 257% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.12 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.16 8.32208582834 134% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.8 11.1389221557 277% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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