Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of this statement argues that Omega graduates have not been as successful as Alpha university at securing jobs because of the evaluation process of the professors at Omega university. And so he recommends that the evaluation process of the Omega professors should be terminated. This argument of his is very much flawed and based on several unwarrented assumptions.
First of all, The author mentions about a "new" procedure that was implemanted at the Omega University fifteen years ago and unfairly assumes that this method is still effective at the university without any evidence. Fifteen years is a long time, and a lot can happen in a long time.So, unless the author provides proper and conclusive evidence to verify this assumption, there's nothing to support this claim of the author.
Additionally, the author also assumes that the professors at the Omega university have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and this is the reason overall student grade average at Omega university have risen up to 30 percent. But he provides no evidence that the professors have been assigning higher grades or or no data or statistics about the results of the students. Perhaps, the professors are not assigning good grades, perhaps the students are studying hard to get a good results because of the problems they are facing at getting jobs. If This scenerio is true, then the author claim about the professors grading or the improvement of the result does not hold water.
The author also assumes that the reason why the students are not being able to secure jobs is the grading method of the professors and the sudden improvement of the results. But there is no evidence to support that assumption. Perhaps the Omega graduates have good results but does not have some other qualities which are required to secure the jobs they trying for. No information and evidence os provided about the jobs, and the requirements of the employers by the author, so there's no way to be sure why the Omega graduates are failing to secure those jobs.
Finally, the author compares the graduates and their success rate with another university named Alpha university. Yet, he provides no information about Alpha university and unfairly assumes that they are similar. But there's a possibility that this is not the case. Perhaps, the graduates of Alpha university are more successful at securing jobs, because they are better candidates for these jobs, and they inherit the qualities the emoloyers are looking. Unless the author provides any information about Alpha university, we have no way to know that both the universities and their graduates are similar or not.
In conclusion, I have to say that the authors statement is quite flawed and based on a lot of unwarrented assumptions, without any conclusive evidence. Unless, proper evidence are provided to support these assumptions, the authors recommendations of teminating the student evaluation of the professors at Omega university can not be accepted
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2470 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.99 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.763 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.602 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...First of all, The author mentions about a 'new' procedure that was impl...
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Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...me, and a lot can happen in a long time.So, unless the author provides proper and ...
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Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ive evidence to verify this assumption, theres nothing to support this claim of the au...
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Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: or
...ssors have been assigning higher grades or or no data or statistics about the results...
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Line 9, column 480, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ents of the employers by the author, so theres no way to be sure why the Omega graduat...
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Line 13, column 218, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...irly assumes that they are similar. But theres a possibility that this is not the case...
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Line 17, column 39, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... In conclusion, I have to say that the authors statement is quite flawed and based on ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, so, still, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2544.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 494.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14979757085 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82088052669 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.392712550607 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7684564868 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.2 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273605308244 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862848213158 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861870279037 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150833121689 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694814147305 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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