The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Dr.Karp, anthropologist, claims that the former study of the island, Tertia and its village culture is invalid and his study is more accurate. He asserts that his invterview-based study has shown different understanding with the former perspective, Dr.Fields', of the village people which was that the entire village reared childeren without letting only the biological parents breed their child. In order for Dr.Karp's argument to hold water, their are some void, unanswered evidences to be filled.
Firstly, Dr.Karp tries to find out the island's cultures with comparing two chronologically -different study. Dr.Field's observation-based research was conducted twenty years ago, which might have been sufficient amount of time to let the island's culture to be changed. To deprecate and invalidate Dr.Field's study, Dr.Karp has to offer an evidence that the tradition of the island has not changed hitherto. In some chance, if this proves to be unwarranted, his arguement's power loses validation.
Although, Dr.Karp conducted an interview-based research he does not present informations and details on regarding the interview. His selection of respondents were children. There could be more justability endorsed if he choose some elder residents and adults who actually rear children.
Moreover, he tries to debunk Dr.Field's research which is about who are rearing kids, but Dr.Karp investigated on the interview which merely says children likes to spend much more time talking about their biological parents. This does not prove that the answerers are raised by biological parents. The children, indeed, might just like to talk to their biological parents more than other adults. To justifiy his claim, there should be other evidences like children responding that they spend more time with their biological parents overall, for example, for eating, sleeping and playing as well rather than just talking.
Lastly, Dr.Karp states that observation-centered approach to studying cultures are invaild. Even if, Dr.Karps's study and perspective of the island's culture is verified, and Dr.Field was wrong on his observations, this could not prove that general observation-centered approach to study cultures are fallacious. There can be other well-conducted, corroborated observation-study on figuring out resident's cultures in certain areas. If Dr.Karp wants to maintain this claim, he should prove that there are some kind of fallacy in observation based method in generall.
Therefore, Dr.Karp's suggestion is left with some assumptions to be clarified before his argument being justified. He should concern the chronological difference in his and Dr.Field's study. Moreover, he can strengthen his argument by manifesting more details about his interview. Also, his conclustion seems to be logically jumped from his presented evidences.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2343 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.337 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.074 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.757 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.177 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tanding with the former perspective, Dr.Fields, of the village people which was that t...
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...ents breed their child. In order for Dr.Karps argument to hold water, their are some ...
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...d evidences to be filled. Firstly, Dr.Karp tries to find out the islands cultures ...
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...wo chronologically -different study. Dr.Fields observation-based research was conducte...
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...changed. To deprecate and invalidate Dr.Fields study, Dr.Karp has to offer an evidence...
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...cate and invalidate Dr.Fields study, Dr.Karp has to offer an evidence that the tradi...
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...ildren. Moreover, he tries to debunk Dr.Fields research which is about who are rearing...
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...idents cultures in certain areas. If Dr.Karp wants to maintain this claim, he should...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, in general, kind of, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6926713948 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16787163465 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527186761229 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.6071809827 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.454545455 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86363636364 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289069161343 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915217539341 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600101881647 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168888255244 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450041838309 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.5979740519 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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