Claim: Colleges and universities should specify all required courses and eliminate elective courses in order to provide clear guidance for students.
Reason: College students — like people in general — prefer to follow directions rather than make their own decisions.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Colleges and universities offer a plethora of subjects and courses. Because of this, some students might have difficulties in making choices and become overwhelmed. The claim argues that colleges should specify all required courses and elimnate elctive courses in order to provide clear guidance for students. Yet, I mostly disagree to the suggestion of removing elective courses for the following couple of reasons.
Firstly, the argue bases on the reason that most people in general prefer to follow directions rather than making their own decisions. Indeed, there are many people who likes to be guided clearly and specifically of their directions. Still, there are numerous people if not a few, who likes to utilize their freedom and choose their options on their own. Most importantly, there are students entering university or college who's willing to study or participate in classes of unfamiliar subjects which they have been waiting for hitherto. Because, until highschool, most of school curriculums were fixed and oppertunity to choose their own path were highly limited to only following on certain paths. Former Apper founder and CEO, Steve Jobs, was not interested in his major and curriculum so he choose to enroll in a typography elective course. This famous past choice of his became so famous after, when he released a beautiful typography ingrained computer operating system which differentiated with other computer comanies by the means of Kansei(human soul touching) or user experience.
Every student has their major when they enter college or university. They have to focus on the major-related subjects. Yet, they should have the rights and at least few amounts of time on studying fields which they do not purse for living as well. For example, nowadays, students who do not major in science or math are choosing computer sciences subject for their electives very popularaly. Because of the skyrocketing interest in IT(Information Technology), computer science subjects like devloping, programming languages has high enrollment rate for many different major students, not for just literature studying students but also physical education majoring student as well, and etc.
Truely, for some students they might want a clear, indicative curriculum on each semester on what classes to enroll and simply there are students who does not have enough time to pursue other subjects which does not belong to their major because their major is such difficult or time-consuming. However for abovementioned reasons, I mostly disagree to the claim and electives should not be eliminated. Rather, colleges and universities should offer more competitive and versatile elective courses for the students' future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...following couple of reasons. Firstly, the argue bases on the reason that most people in...
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Line 2, column 424, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: who's
...students entering university or college whos willing to study or participate in clas...
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Line 2, column 795, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...ested in his major and curriculum so he choose to enroll in a typography elective cour...
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Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... languages has high enrollment rate for many different major students, not for just literature...
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Line 3, column 679, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...cal education majoring student as well, and etc. Truely, for some students they might ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...or is such difficult or time-consuming. However for abovementioned reasons, I mostly di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, well, at least, for example, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2298.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43262411348 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80517946852 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1859782892 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.947368421 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2631578947 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413672833845 0.243740707755 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131803000266 0.0831039109588 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111367789309 0.0758088955206 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271480081836 0.150359130593 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102399521892 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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