The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the above passage, the author argues that because the children when interviewed spoke more about their biological parents than other people in the village, it implies that Dr. Fields observation is wrong. The author also suggests that the observation centered approach is invalid and the interview centered approach used is valid. There are a few questions that need to be answered in order to buttress the authors conclusion so it can be considered.
Dr. Field had observed the members of the island almost twenty years ago. Is the culture followed on the island when the author visited comparable to the culture followed by the people on the island twenty years ago? Are the children being reared in the exact same way that they were being reared twenty years ago. So once these questions are answered the authors conclusion can be considered
The author mentions that the children when interviewed, spend more time speaking about their biological parents than other people in the village. What the author fails to mention is that what was being spoken of the parents and also of the other adults in the village. The child speaking more of his or her biological parents does not mean that he or her was reared only by the biological parents. It would help one come to a clearer conclusion if the author could specify what the children spoke about the parents and the other adults in the village.
The author also seems to have come to the conclusion that his/her method used in understanding the culture at Tertia is superior and accurate compared to the method used by the Dr. Field. The author also mentions that this method will help get a better understanding of the culture followed by the Tertian people and also the cultures in other islands. What the author fails to mention is how the interview centered method is accurate. How does the author know that whatever the people in the interview tell are actually accurate and is followed by the people.
If the author could answer the following questions, then the conclusion that the author has come to might be considered.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1704 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.76 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.398 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.428 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.406 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.406 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 411, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...to be answered in order to buttress the authors conclusion so it can be considered. Dr...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 356, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...o once these questions are answered the authors conclusion can be considered The autho...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, then, speaking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 357.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45324745093 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.394957983193 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.571143838 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.6 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26666666667 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132486686481 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609428256789 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741254737268 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842716514521 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835066965392 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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