The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the letter suggests that Seatown University should institue a free-tuition policy for its professor for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring in new professors. The author makes this suggestion because of a study that was conducted at a nearby Oceania University which showed that the faculty retention was higher when free tuition was offered for their own children. In order to consider the statement, a the following questions must be answered to buttress the statement made.
Firstly, it is stated that at the nearby Oceania University the faculty retention is higher because they offered free tuition at the university. This means that the children of the faculty at Oceania University chose to attend classes at said University instead of other Universities. Will it be the same for Seatown University. Are the children of the faculty at Seatown University willing to attend that particular University other than the plethora of other Universities available. Even with free tuition offered, if the children prefer to attend Universities elsewhere, then the argument holds no water. Without this question being answered, it is difficult to consider the authors suggestion.
Secondly, is the Seatown University on the same league as the nearby Oceania University. Can both the Universities be compared to each other and be thought of as somewhat similar. Does Seatown University offer courses that are popular and have high tuition fees where if a professor were to admit their children, it would save them a lot of money while being beneficial to the child. It can be assumed that Oceania University offered a courses that the professors wanted to put their children into. Is it the same at Seatown University. This question must also be answered in order to take the authors suggestion into consideration.
Lastly, is there a different reason for the high faculty retention rate at Oceania University other than the author has suggested. Is the offer of free tuition at Oceania not the reason but a completely different thing for the high faculty retention rate altogether. In that case offering free tuition to the professors children at Seatown University just because they did so at Oceania University may or may not yield any results.
To conclude, the author must provide answers to the above three questions in order to support the suggestion. Only after that can the authors suggestion be taken into consideration
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2033 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.095 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.721 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.743 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 442, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...en. In order to consider the statement, a the following questions must be answered to...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ered to buttress the statement made. Firstly, it is stated that at the nearby...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...swered, it is difficult to consider the authors suggestion. Secondly, is the S...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to consider the authors suggestion. Secondly, is the Seatown University on t...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a course' or simply 'courses'?
Suggestion: a course; courses
...assumed that Oceania University offered a courses that the professors wanted to put their...
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Line 5, column 601, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t also be answered in order to take the authors suggestion into consideration. ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thors suggestion into consideration. Lastly, is there a different reason for ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y may or may not yield any results. To conclude, the author must provide ans...
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Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...the suggestion. Only after that can the authors suggestion be taken into consideration ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81469590712 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.431077694236 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7150939205 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.95 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.95 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524047293427 0.218282227539 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17909902857 0.0743258471296 241% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140570007578 0.0701772020484 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306333753549 0.128457276422 238% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173820905218 0.0628817314937 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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