The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
The letter in the above prompt stated that a study suggests that the faculty retention rate increased in the Oceania University after their professors were offered free tuition at university for their own college-aged children and the letter suggests Seatown university should use this as an example and start a similar policy in their university to enhance the moral among faculty and to lure in new professors. I disagree with the suggestion made by the letter for the following three reason.
Firstly, the letter doesn't provide us with how extensive was the study which was conducted near the Oceania University. It just states that the study was conducted near the Oceania University. It could be that the people who were part of the study all had a college-aged child and could have excluded the professor who do not have a offspring or a progeny that is no where close to college age. This weakens the argument and renders the authenticity of the study as debased. The letter should have mentioned in detail the people who partook in the study, this would have strengthened it's argument.
Secondly, there is no proof that implementing this strategy increased the moral of the professors and lured in new one's. All that the letter states is that after implementing this the retention rate of the faculty increased. It could have been that the faculty were not in high morale but just wanted to be in the university till there college aged children pass out of the university so they can reap the benefits of the free tuition fee, and the claim of luring in new professors is completely baseless and is just an unwarranted assumption made by the letter which inadvertently weaken the argument. The letter fails to provide any correlation between the two, if it did it could have made its argument more appealing.
Finally, just because this strategy worked in the Oceania University gives no guaranty it will also work in Seatown University. It could be that most of the professors in the Oceania University had a college-age child when the study was conducted and therefore preferred to stay at the university to get an added benefit. While the case could be completely inverse at the Seatown university and the professor do not have any college-aged children and this policy would give them no incentive to stay at the university.
In conclusion the argument is flawed and utterly unconvincing for the above mentioned assumption it makes. If the letter had provided the relevant information based by a few example it could have made a case for itself but as it stands it is weak claim and with very little to back it up.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ng three reason. Firstly, the letter doesnt provide us with how extensive was the s...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... excluded the professor who do not have a offspring or a progeny that is no where...
^
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...t have a offspring or a progeny that is no where close to college age. This weaken...
^^
Line 9, column 171, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun example seems to be countable; consider using: 'few examples'.
Suggestion: few examples
...ded the relevant information based by a few example it could have made a case for itself bu...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 450.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86444444444 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71122130924 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411111111111 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.582522196 57.8364921388 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.8125 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328195445559 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106272327737 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101716843168 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193167126843 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126855683047 0.0628817314937 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ng three reason. Firstly, the letter doesnt provide us with how extensive was the s...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... excluded the professor who do not have a offspring or a progeny that is no where...
^
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...t have a offspring or a progeny that is no where close to college age. This weaken...
^^
Line 9, column 171, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun example seems to be countable; consider using: 'few examples'.
Suggestion: few examples
...ded the relevant information based by a few example it could have made a case for itself bu...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 450.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86444444444 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71122130924 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411111111111 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.582522196 57.8364921388 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.8125 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328195445559 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106272327737 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101716843168 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193167126843 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126855683047 0.0628817314937 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.