The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for thei

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The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:

A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Following this letter sent from the faculty committee at Seatown University, the letter explains that to retain faculty, the university should adopt a free-tuition policy based of a survey done at another nearby school which showed that there was a connection between higher retention rates of faculty and the free tuition policy. While at the surface, that sounds like a great idea that Seatown Unversity, the committee's letter is rife with holes and unwarranted assumptions that need to be dealt with before they can move forward.

First, the committee is assuming that the faculty at Seatown University wants the same policy of free tuition as the nearby Oceania University based on a study done at the latter. The issue is that this study the committee is citing does not mention if any of the Seatown faculty were a part of the study. There was no connection to the Seatown faculty to this study directly and were not asked to see if this would be something that they would be interested in implementing. The faculty could want something completely different such as pay raises, better healthcare or larger contributions to retirement. There is a total disregard and unwarranted assumptions made by the committee to jump to the idea that the faculty at Seatown strive for the same policies as Oceania University.
Second, there are other ways in which retention of faculty can be affected. The faculty at Oceania could have their benefits changed in a negative way, which could drive faculty away from the university. To combat this, Oceania University could have surveyed the faculty after adding the policy showing the "success" of the policy. Another situation is the university could have a hostile environment, driving faculty away and this policy was adopted to keep people from leaving. There are too many alternative situations in which could have occurred and can not correlate the success of the policy from one college to the next.

Finally, we do not know the contents of the study. How many people were involved? Who takes part in the study? If there were only a few faculty members that took part of the study, then the data being used is unreliable and should not be trusted. Seatown University has not released any information in which to support their claim that the policy is something that is desired by their faculty. This plus the shaky study being used leads more to the conclusion that the committee has not done its research and consulted the correct people and thus should not move forward until more questions are answered.

While it is understandable that the committee wants to retain its faculty, they have not shown any supporting evidence that the faculty at their university desire this policy, used a shaky study from another university to support their claim and before they move forward, they must fill the many holes and answer questions before anything implemented.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 134, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, then, thus, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2444.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02880658436 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64885710643 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425925925926 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.0078369338 57.8364921388 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.631578947 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5789473684 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31578947368 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393432434129 0.218282227539 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12529329197 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126224804302 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237942368978 0.128457276422 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110498975438 0.0628817314937 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2383 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.504 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.975 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5