Television advertising directed toward young children
(aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Advertising is a way companies get people to sell whatever product they are selling. The author suggests that Television advertisements directed at young children must not be allowed. I disagree with the author and the following are the reasons as to why.
Advertisements help pay for the program that comes on the television. So irrespective of the audience the program is directed at, some form of advertising will be present. Therefore, I personally feel that it would be better to have advertisements directed at children during the breaks of a children’s television program. It would not be nice to have advertisements directed to adults while children are watching their favorite programs. Advertisements on soft toys and Legos are far more children friendly compared to advertisements for a gym with some adult humor in it.
Secondly, these advertisements will probably give the parents an idea about what they can buy their children, or what’s new on the market that would help their child grow. Especially for parents who are new to parenting and have no idea what to buy their children, these advertisements could be of some help. For example, advertisements about the latest Lego set, or English Flashcards would be informative to new parents since there is no harm caused to children from either of those products. Since parents usually sit with their children while they watch television, these types of advertisements could be of some help.
So to conclude, I think it is better to advertise to small children for the above reasons only. While there might be a negative side to this, there is also the fact that the parents have the authority to decide what to buy and what not to buy for their children so hence they won’t be in a situation where they will have to buy everything that is advertised for their children.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99029126214 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97457659271 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47572815534 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4192436702 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.142857143 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265478990996 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125885107194 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886112511296 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191896173568 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627958286761 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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