The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the article written by Dr. Karp, it's stated that the conclusion made by Dr. Field during his visit island of Tertia regarding Tertian village culture is not valid. For supporting his claim Dr. karp depends on the results of his recent interview with the children living in the group of island which includes Tertia also. To find the correctness of the conclusion made by the Dr. Karp evidence of the following points need to be provided.
Firstly, To reach the conclusion Dr. Karp depends on the interview done by him with the some group of children which also include children of Tertia. But, its no where mention that that in a group of children of island how many are form Tertia. If in group of children of island only very small number is form the Tertia. Also, if response children of Tertia is not as conclusion of Dr. Karpe conclusion but due to small number in the group made their response less effective in overall response. If any of points has merit then it will significantly weaken the conclusion of Dr. Karp.
Secondly, The method use by team of graduate student for research is more accurate for the other island children but not significance for the Tertia children. No evidence is provided for supporting that method use for the understanding the child-rearing tradition will be effective for the Tertia children also.
Latstly, no evidence has provided which help that conclusion made by Dr. Field is not true.
In conclusion, the conclusion made Dr. Karp will be standing as now flawed due to it's reliance on the major assumption. If author is able to provide the evidence asked above (perhaps in the form of systematic research study form ) the it is possible to fully evaluate the correctness of Dr. Karp conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 301 350
No. of Characters: 1417 1500
No. of Different Words: 130 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.579 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.447 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.438 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.688 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e group of island which includes Tertia also. To find the correctness of the conclus...
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Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...s on the interview done by him with the some group of children which also include ch...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...so include children of Tertia. But, its no where mention that that in a group of c...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...en of Tertia. But, its no where mention that that in a group of children of island how ma...
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Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ren of island how many are form Tertia. If in group of children of island only ver...
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Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nse less effective in overall response. If any of points has merit then it will si...
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Line 9, column 307, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ll be effective for the Tertia children also. Latstly, no evidence has provided...
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Line 17, column 121, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o its reliance on the major assumption. If author is able to provide the evidence ...
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Line 17, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e form of systematic research study form the it is possible to fully evaluate the...
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Line 17, column 230, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...form of systematic research study form the it is possible to fully evaluate the corre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 301.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84717607973 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63488034882 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435215946844 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 434.7 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3956504532 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.230769231 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251521392264 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112734189245 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640280017645 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144865501971 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088612583719 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.3550499002 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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