The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist."Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire villag

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The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.

"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the article written by Dr. Karp, it is stated that his research related to children in Tertia and other groups of people living in other islands debunks the findings of Dr. Field. Dr. Karp’s research found that children living in these islands spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other villagers, even though these children were reared by the entire village instead of being solely nurtured by their parents. However, before the argument in the prompt can be properly evaluated, three key points must be answered.

First of all, the author is suggesting that the people from Tertia in which Dr. Field spent time with twenty years ago and the current version of Tertia’s population, where himself conducted the research, are the same. However, this might not be the case. One possible scenario that undermines this assumption is that villagers from the island teach the young ones to obey their parents and to always look at them as being role models. This might explain why when Dr. Karp encountered the children for the first time, he described the children as being more close to their parents. Another possible explanation could be that Dr. Karp got confused when he started talking to the local people. It is mentioned in the prompt that Dr. Karp conducted research in different islands, including Tertia. One possibility could be that due to numerous different groups, he might have used erroneously a word that has a meaning in one tribe and another completely different meaning for Tertia’s individuals. Therefore, If either have merit, then the conclusion drawn from the original statement is severely weakened.

Secondly, he criticizes Dr. Field for using an observation-centered approach in his research twenty years ago while stating that the interview – centered method is the right way to go. He prematurely assumes that Dr. Field’s methods are invalid, providing information that the current interview method that his team is using is much more accurate. One possible explanation for the observation-centered approach from Dr. Field might be that he was well aware that people from these islands were not keen towards outsiders, especially people from the city. He might have received the information that people from the tribe, in order to trick him, would give false information when questioned. That might explain why Dr. Karp, instead of conducting interviews with all the people from the island, just observed activities of the people from Tertia. If this is valid, then the argument does not hold water.

In conclusion, the argument as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the key points mentioned above and provide more evidence towards his findings, then it is possible to fully evaluate the ideas in the passage.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 838, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'numerous'.
Suggestion: numerous
...a. One possibility could be that due to numerous different groups, he might have used erroneously ...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, talking about, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 468.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1858974359 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78003442195 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491452991453 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2034294751 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.736842105 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6315789474 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282227215579 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843823762517 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790333256634 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154979050268 0.128457276422 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837549152769 0.0628817314937 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 467 350
No. of Characters: 2349 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.649 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.03 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.642 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.846 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5