The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds andpedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The above argument appears to be based on a number of facile assumptions. There seems to be several unanswered questions that need to be highlighted. First, it does not address the question whether the accidents in Balmer Island that involve mopeds or pedestrians might arise out of general ignorance of the traffic safety rules or other relatable issues. In that case, reducing the number of mopeds during the summer season would not do much in lessening the rate of accidents. It is also not clear whether there would be any alternatives to mopeds in Blamer Islands, or what impact would the reduction in the limits have on the tourism industry. Besides, it failed to answer whether the Seaville’s town council incorporated any other measures than only enforcing similar limits on moped rentals, because of which the rates of accidents have declined. Taking these unanswered issues into consideration, it becomes highly uncertain whether the speaker’s recommendations would bear the predicted results.
At the very beginning, the argument gives us an acccount of the influx of tourists during the summer months to the Balmer Islands and informs about the most popular means of transportation in the Island. It then seems to quickly escalade, to relate the two as a cause of the accidents occuring in Balmer Island during the summer. Here itself, the argument misses to elucidate on the following two points. First, whether the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians occur only during the summer months or whether they are frequent in the rest of the years too. Second, whether these accidents are a result of the riders’ negligence, or whether it is the general apathy of the inhabitants or tourists to the traffic safety rules, or due to unfavorable road conditions. These issues to be answered because, if at all the accidents are a common feature in the rest of the year too, then restricting the moped rentals only during the summer months would not help reduce the overall rate. Also, if the second point is not thoroughly investigated, then only by enforcing restrictions on the rentals would not help solve the issue off accidents. Other concerned measures like improving the road conditions or increasing the awareness of the public and tourists, penalizing the culpable riders, etc., would be additionally required to curb the number of accidents in Blamer Island.
The argument clearly states that mopeds form a popular means of transportation in the area. But again it lacks an answer to whether there would there be any alterative to the mopeds during the summers, if limits on the rentals are imposed. It does not state whether the transportation system might be hampered without the mopeds. Besides, the argument neglects the fact that due to the limitations on a popular means of transport, the might also be an effect on the tourism industry during the summer months.
Finally, the comparison between the neighboring island Seaville’s town council and that of Balmer Island’s too, contains a few loopholes. The speaker does not elucidate on the fact whether it was solely by implementing the limits on moped rentals that reduced the accidents, or whether there were other factors too. The facts like a reduction in overall population of Seaville, or massive traffic safety awareness drives, or improvement in the road conditions etc, are quite likely to have been taken place. The argument thus presents an incomplete picture in this regard.
The above flaws in the argument seriously impairs its credibility. The speaker would have cited reliable data or statistics on the relation that it draws between the restrictions on moped rentals and reduction of accidents thereof. The arguement would have benefited by providing an alternative to the mopeds by which the transportation system would continue uninterrupted. Moreover, the comparison of the issue with a neighboring island, could have been more relatable if further analysis were provided on the achievements of the later. Therefore, in the absence of these few points, the recommendations made in the argument cannot be said to yield the intended results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 178, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...highlighted. First, it does not address the question whether the accidents in Balmer Island that inv...
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Line 2, column 408, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...e, reducing the number of mopeds during the summer season would not do much in lessening the rate...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'misses elucidating'.
Suggestion: misses elucidating
...g the summer. Here itself, the argument misses to elucidate on the following two points. First, whe...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd point is not thoroughly investigated, then only by enforcing restrictions on t...
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...s form a popular means of transportation in the area. But again it lacks an answe...
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... quite likely to have been taken place. The argument thus presents an incomplete pi...
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... incomplete picture in this regard. The above flaws in the argument seriously i...
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...ment seriously impairs its credibility. The speaker would have cited reliable data ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ave cited reliable data or statistics on the relation that it draws between the r...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...als and reduction of accidents thereof. The arguement would have benefited by provi...
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...ve benefited by providing an alternative to the mopeds by which the transportatio...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260572987722 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.135061391542 0.15541462614 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0641200545703 0.0836205057962 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0600272851296 0.0520304965353 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0190995907231 0.0272364105082 70% => OK
Prepositions: 0.139154160982 0.125424944231 111% => OK
Participles: 0.0422919508868 0.0416121511921 102% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86106477782 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0259208731241 0.026700313972 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.148703956344 0.113004496875 132% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0218281036835 0.0255425247493 85% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00954979536153 0.0127820249294 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4169.0 2731.13054187 153% => OK
No of words: 671.0 446.07635468 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.2131147541 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08956458786 4.57801047555 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.412816691505 0.378187486979 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.305514157973 0.287650121315 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.202682563338 0.208842608468 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140089418778 0.135150697306 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86106477782 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 207.018472906 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427719821162 0.469332199767 91% => OK
Word variations: 53.0698144833 52.1807786196 102% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.039408867 140% => OK
Sentence length: 23.9642857143 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1595175247 57.7814097925 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.892857143 141.986410481 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9642857143 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.428571428571 0.724660767414 59% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 54.5157015116 51.9672348444 105% => OK
Elegance: 2.06369426752 1.8405768891 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.686668656153 0.441005458295 156% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129162766147 0.135418324435 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0715928777986 0.0829849096947 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.616891970718 0.58762219726 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130301713083 0.147661913831 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.337605847299 0.193483328276 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120048040114 0.0970749176394 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.635931647802 0.42659136922 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0817278919973 0.0774707102158 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.550201531874 0.312017818177 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765669975766 0.0698173142475 110% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 6.87684729064 276% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 19.0 5.36822660099 354% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 28.0 14.657635468 191% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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