The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author in the above letter claims that the number of shoppers in central plaza has decreased in past two years as the popularity of skateboarding has increased. To support his claim he provides the evidence, that the increase in the number of skateboard users has caused an increase in litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, he concludes that in order to bring back the business in Central Plaza, government should prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. But, the argument rest on many loopholes and many questions are needed to be answered in order to consider the argument as true.
The author asserts that skateboarding has led to the decrease in shoppers in Central Plaza, but is it true that any other factor did not caused the decrease in shoppers? Author assumes that other factors didn't attributed to the decrease in shoppers. It can be true that due to poor customer satisfaction, lack of customer care service, faulty products led to a deacrease in the customers. What if the shops in Central Plaza changed their busniess strategies which failed miserably? It can be true that customers didn't like their new plans and resisted them to visit stores. Because of their failure in the new strategy could be reason for the decrease in the shoppers. Also the author assumes that prohibitng skateboarding will bring back the central plaza in back into business, but it could be true that some skateboard users used to shop sometimes and after prohibiting skateboarding will cause a more lose to the Central plaza. If the above questions and assumptions are true then it would undermine the author's conclusion that skateboarding were the reasons for decrease in number of shoppers. From the above, the author provides lack of information and requires more explanation to support his conclusion.
Author provides the study of past two years, but is the study valid? Was the data taken for the studies was from each and every stores in Central Plaza? Because if the study was done on some particular shops which was already going through a loss and very less number of shoppers used to visit the store, then it will obviously help in supporting the author's conclusion. Does the study takes all other factors for the loss of shoppers? It could be possible that due to poor maintainence of Central Plaza repelled shopppers to come. If other factors like these are true then it would undermine the author's conclusion. The above study lack proper information and needs more explanation to support the argument.
In conclusion, It can be said that the whole conclusion of author stands on weak evidences, the author has not offered convincing explanation to support his views. The study requires more evidence to hold the roots of the argument. Thus, it cannot be concluded that prohibiting skateboarding will strive the business back in Central Plaza.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9=0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 480 350
No. of Characters: 2348 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.681 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.892 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.656 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.87 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.285 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.331 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...s it true that any other factor did not caused the decrease in shoppers? Author assume...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 204, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...pers? Author assumes that other factors didnt attributed to the decrease in shoppers....
^^^^^
Line 2, column 512, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...iserably? It can be true that customers didnt like their new plans and resisted them ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 669, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...eason for the decrease in the shoppers. Also the author assumes that prohibitng skat...
^^^^
Line 2, column 836, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'shop'.
Suggestion: sometimes shop
...true that some skateboard users used to shop sometimes and after prohibiting skateboarding wil...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1008, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ns are true then it would undermine the authors conclusion that skateboarding were the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t will obviously help in supporting the authors conclusion. Does the study takes all ot...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take'?
Suggestion: take
... the authors conclusion. Does the study takes all other factors for the loss of shopp...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ntral Plaza repelled shopppers to come. If other factors like these are true then ...
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Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...se are true then it would undermine the authors conclusion. The above study lack proper...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99581589958 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71130675653 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405857740586 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9848748389 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.826086957 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.91304347826 5.70786347227 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304911617413 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10006230393 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113913603379 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209872875054 0.128457276422 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116047683677 0.0628817314937 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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