The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a journal on environmental issues.
"Over the past year, the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on this land will inevitably result in pollution and, since West Fredonia is the home of several endangered animal species, in environmental disaster. But such disasters can be prevented if consumers simply refuse to purchase products that are made with CCC's copper unless the company abandons its mining plans."
In a letter to the editor of a journal, the author concludes that the reason behind the environmental disaster is the mining of crust copper company that is over 10,000 square miles. Moreover, the degradation of endangered species and augmentation of pollution is assumed that the effect on the tropical nation of West Fredonia. However, the author cites the three assumptions which need to be substantiated to conclude, if not, the argument will fall apart.
Firstly, perhaps the crust copper company had might purchased the land over 10,000 square miles for future investment or other projects. There is no lucid evidence or clear linkage given regarding the use of land in the future. There might be a possibility that mines of the company are very near to the location and this land will be for their residential purpose for workers. If either of these scenarios is true then, the author's contention of environmental disaster will significantly do not hold the water. However, if mining on the land is started it will dreadfully affect the topography and ecosystem of the land. Hiking in the pollution will affect the public health of people and attenuated the standard of living, and air quality which turbid the environment of the land the result in an environmental disaster, and affect the endangered species.
Secondly, the assumption of escalating the pollution on the land might not hold true because the company may have started using advanced technology for the mining system which will contribute rarely in pollution. The author might have cited his point base on older records of the mining industry which is extremely equivocated in this scenario. Even if company has not adopted pollution free technique for mining, it may be possible that company will heal tor cleanup the pollution in most plum way that it will not be resulted as pernicious for the land. Idf either of the situation turns true authors assumption of boycotting copper product made with company will maladjusted. Moreover this suggestion can drametically affect the economy of Fredonia. The endangered species might be at different locations in sanctuary which dose not affect due the mining copper. Thus the location details and other evidences must be given.
Moreover, the suggestion of author of spurning crust copper company’s product if evidence less. Company might deliver the extracted copper to the retailers and earn the profit which contributed the nations economy. So unless there is no proof that company’s production of copper product is substantial authors claim of boycott is not valid.
However, if company started mining the land with precautionary measures it will conducive to the local people in terms of employment which eventually can be beneficial to the country. Moreover, if company started producing copper goods it will escalate the value of nation globally and helpful to create an identity.
In totality, to identify the situation of land usage, proposal of company’s must have given to elucidate the picture. Incisive topographical and demography data is required to study the boons and perils of mining in the area. However, boycotting company’s good is not only the solution. It need gross support from nation to do so. As of now the argument is standing on three unfolded assumption that is renders its conclusion at unpersuasive the best and specious at the worst. Thus the author need to provide additional evidence of company’s use of land or prospect, the technology of mining system used for land, location of land that it is how much far from the sanctuary, and whether people can differentiate in between crust copper company products and its other competitors.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 600 350
No. of Characters: 3036 1500
No. of Different Words: 261 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.949 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.06 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 235 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 175 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.429 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.63 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.046 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 53, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have purchased' or 'purchase'?
Suggestion: have purchased; purchase
...haps the crust copper company had might purchased the land over 10,000 square miles for f...
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Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...er of these scenarios is true then, the authors contention of environmental disaster wi...
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Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve started using advanced technology for the mining system which will contribute ...
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Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'contribute'.
Suggestion: rarely contribute
...ology for the mining system which will contribute rarely in pollution. The author might have ci...
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Line 4, column 597, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... Idf either of the situation turns true authors assumption of boycotting copper product...
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Line 4, column 681, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...uct made with company will maladjusted. Moreover this suggestion can drametically affect...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 868, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... dose not affect due the mining copper. Thus the location details and other evidence...
^^^^
Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...d earn the profit which contributed the nations economy. So unless there is no proof th...
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Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... which contributed the nations economy. So unless there is no proof that company’s produc...
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Line 7, column 384, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'assumption' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'assumptions'.
Suggestion: assumptions
... argument is standing on three unfolded assumption that is renders its conclusion at unper...
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Line 7, column 478, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ive the best and specious at the worst. Thus the author need to provide additional e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.9520958084 208% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3105.0 2260.96107784 137% => OK
No of words: 600.0 441.139720559 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.175 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81027430452 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 204.123752495 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 968.4 705.55239521 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0244900398 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40740740741 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360359569221 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995055258633 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878394545695 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206564833559 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721785857146 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 98.500998004 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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