The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In order to reduce rush hour traffic of blue highway, adding a bicycle lane is being considered as a better alternative instead of widening the highway by adding an additional lane as there are keen bicyclists in the area and the consequences after widening the highway in a nearby highway was not positive.However, before implementing such action, the authority must answer certain questions for avoiding possible flaws in the assumptions.
First of all, commuters who are the actual sufferer of the rush hour traffic are proposing to widen the high way by adding an additional lane of traffic. there is af possibility that the majority if the commuters are preferring motor vehicle.The highway between the suburbs and the city center must be a long journey for the commuters which is why they may not prefer bicycle as the medium of commute.A bicycle lane, thus would not encourage them to use bicycles and would not have any impact in reducing the rush hour traffic.
Secondly, the keen bicyclists of the area might not be the one who is complaining. perhaps they do not use bicycle for high way instead prefer biking within the less rushing ways inside the suburbs. Moreover, bicycle for highway travel is not considered safe which is a concern for safety issue for the commuters. thus it would have no impact on reducing rush hour traffic of the high way.
Finally, the nearby green highway that implemented widening the highway by an additional lane last year had a negative impact probably because it has a completely different type of commuters. perhaps blue highway has no similarity with green highway in terms of utilization. Additionally, the comparison with the consequences which happened a year back is certainly absurd as the scenario changes with time quite fast.
In conclusion, there are major flaws in the assumptions that require significant amount of modifications to be considered as a pragmatic approach. The authority must find out possible evidences before implementing any such action. there is a possibility of a better solution to be implemented in such case. The authority must analyze the scenario prudently in order to bring out the best possible solution.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1797 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.937 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.731 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.589 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.709 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a lane'.
Suggestion: adding a lane
...tive instead of widening the highway by adding an additional lane as there are keen bicyclists in the are...
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Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ay in a nearby highway was not positive.However, before implementing such action, the a...
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a lane'.
Suggestion: adding a lane
... are proposing to widen the high way by adding an additional lane of traffic. there is af possibility tha...
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...y adding an additional lane of traffic. there is af possibility that the majority if ...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...lity that the majority if the commuters are preferring motor vehicle.The highway between the s...
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Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... commuters are preferring motor vehicle.The highway between the suburbs and the cit...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...prefer bicycle as the medium of commute.A bicycle lane, thus would not encourage ...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...ight not be the one who is complaining. perhaps they do not use bicycle for high way in...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...ern for safety issue for the commuters. thus it would have no impact on reducing rus...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: thus,
...ern for safety issue for the commuters. thus it would have no impact on reducing rus...
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Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...completely different type of commuters. perhaps blue highway has no similarity with gre...
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Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or flaws in the assumptions that require significant amount of modifications to b...
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Line 9, column 233, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...es before implementing any such action. there is a possibility of a better solution t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09695290859 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88467149601 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468144044321 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 108.665842407 57.8364921388 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.428571429 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172537001439 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551858323548 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638073179633 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.096939065499 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805761114426 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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