A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
As the prompt concludes that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay is based on assumptions which do not carry enough reliability. before making any conclusion, the questions aroused with the possible flaws of the assumptions , must be answered with evidence.
Firstly, a direct comparison of tooth decay between the children living in the Himalayan mountain region to the children living in a completely different geographical area which is the suburban of the United States is inappropriate. do the children of both the areas are having similar food and lifestyle habit? if not, then there is no reason to bring a comparison between the two. What if Himalayan food habit and bucolic lifestyle help them to delay tooth decay and not the failure of the dental care which is taken by the suburban of the us.
Secondly, the reliability of the survey would be questioned. how many children did the survey included while making the study? It is possible that the majority of the Himalayan is facing a tooth decay but unaware of the fact. how appropriate was the survey to be considered as reliable? how about there were children with tooth decay who did not acknowledged the fact? may be the children of the suburban of us are more aware of the fact than the Himalayan which is why the survey says that the us children have more tooth decay.
Finally. the assumption that the Himalayan children are receiving little to no professional dental care is flawed. there is a possibility that the Himalayan are having professional dental care as dentists from the developed nations are sent to the remote areas for check up and treatment. Moreover, us suburban in the survey are seeing the dentist only 1.25 times per year which might not be enough according to their food habit. there is a possibility that they eat chocolates and junk food way too much that cause deterioration of their tooth and seek more frequent observation for inhibiting tooth decay. there is no connection of failure of the dental care in this regard.
In conclusion, the assumptions must incorporate further evaluations before coming to any conclusion. The questions aroused in the the discussion must be answered with proper evidence. may be there is a better alternative to the summary. The authority must analyze the scenario meticulously to find the best possible conclusion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1937 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.891 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.73 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.739 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As the prompt concludes that regular denta...
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Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
... which do not carry enough reliability. before making any conclusion, the questions ar...
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Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...th the possible flaws of the assumptions , must be answered with evidence. Firs...
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Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... living in the Himalayan mountain region to the children living in a completely d...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Do
... of the United States is inappropriate. do the children of both the areas are havi...
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Suggestion: If
...aving similar food and lifestyle habit? if not, then there is no reason to bring a...
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Suggestion: How
...lity of the survey would be questioned. how many children did the survey included w...
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... a tooth decay but unaware of the fact. how appropriate was the survey to be consid...
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Suggestion: How
...he survey to be considered as reliable? how about there were children with tooth de...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...ecay who did not acknowledged the fact? may be the children of the suburban of us a...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...e us children have more tooth decay. Finally. the assumption that the Himalayan chil...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: The
...dren have more tooth decay. Finally. the assumption that the Himalayan children ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... no professional dental care is flawed. there is a possibility that the Himalayan are...
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Line 7, column 431, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...e enough according to their food habit. there is a possibility that they eat chocolat...
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Line 7, column 609, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...observation for inhibiting tooth decay. there is no connection of failure of the dent...
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Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ny conclusion. The questions aroused in the the discussion must be answered with proper...
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Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ny conclusion. The questions aroused in the the discussion must be answered with proper...
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Line 9, column 185, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
... must be answered with proper evidence. may be there is a better alternative to the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, as for, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0101010101 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79982487762 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457070707071 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2170545942 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4761904762 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269802817649 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076488465065 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106971664868 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137584387718 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125584278485 0.0628817314937 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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