The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author claims here that if more money should be given to city education, then its place value will be higher in providing good education amongst other cities who have spent less money in education. Stated in this way, the author fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which the argument could be evaluated. Just spending higher money in public schools doesn't ensure the good education and thus the argument is full of dubious assumptions. The author needs to answer several questions in order to evaluate the argument more cogently.
First of all, the author considers only money as a factor of better education and thus claims that more money should provide good amount of education in public schools. However, there must be some other factors which needs to be considered for evaluation of better education. For example, the interest of students in learning new things is a good factor of getting better education. If students are not willing to learn, instead of having good facilities, they won't get much educated. Many schools in small towns and villages are known for their better education instead of having less facilities. Thus, if all the factors for better education are considered and then evaluated, the argument looks more convincing.
Secondly, the author claimed that higher amount spent from tax revenues in public schools result in quality education. However, spending money in public schools without considering other factors doesn't make sense. There may be other aspects in which money from tax revenues and government funds can be spend and of higher priority then public schools. For example, the government can spend their money in maintaince of roadways, creation of public libraries, city maintainance etc. from which can make more benifit to the city. Hence a liable survey needs to be conducted in order to study the areas on which money needs to be spended.
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidences, perhaps by way of detailed analysis of whehter the government fund should actually needs to be spent on public schools or not. Finally, to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know why the public schools need higher money in order to give quality eduation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: For example, the government can spend their money in maintaince of roadways, creation of public libraries, city maintainance etc. from which can make more benifit to the city.
Error: maintainance Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: benifit Suggestion: benefit
Error: maintaince Suggestion: maintain
Sentence: Hence a liable survey needs to be conducted in order to study the areas on which money needs to be spended.
Error: spended Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidences, perhaps by way of detailed analysis of whehter the government fund should actually needs to be spent on public schools or not.
Error: whehter Suggestion: whether
Sentence: Finally, to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know why the public schools need higher money in order to give quality eduation.
Error: eduation Suggestion: education
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1
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minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1900 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.935 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.405 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.43 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...spending higher money in public schools doesnt ensure the good education and thus the ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 582, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun facilities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...heir better education instead of having less facilities. Thus, if all the factors fo...
^^^^
Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...hools without considering other factors doesnt make sense. There may be other aspects ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...hich can make more benifit to the city. Hence a liable survey needs to be conducted i...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ds to be spended. In conclusion, the authors argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'need'
Suggestion: need
...ter the government fund should actually needs to be spent on public schools or not. F...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09162303665 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51050941997 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458115183246 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8504858592 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.368421053 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1052631579 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154850606853 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564226621462 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503280204155 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110990035089 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048872008568 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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