The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve overall productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The director claims that taking the Easy Read course by the employees benifited them greatly since it has enhanced the productivity of many companies. Stated in this way, the director's claim is full of dubious assumptions since it fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which the claim needs to be evaluated. To justify this claim, the director needs to answer several question which could make the argument more cogent.
First of all, the director said that many other companies greatly enhanced their productivity by taking the Easy Read subscription. However, the word "greatly" and "many" doesn't convincingly show the exact amount of companies which are benifited and how much they're benifited. Although, it could be possible that many companies have reduced their productivity after taking the subscription. Furthermore, the director shows the ability of a graduate to read a 500-page report in two hours and an assistant manager to become the vice president, although its not stated in the claim whether they have taken the subscription or not. May be those guys were extraordinary with respect to the other people and that's why they were able to perform their tasks tasks quickly with respect to others. If the director have given the information about the exact number of companies which are benifited from Easy Read course subscription and the number of people benifited from them with resptect to the number of people who have wasted their efforts in the subscription, the claim holds a convincing position.
Scondly, the director is assuming that faster reading is the only factor due to which a person can absore more in a single day. However, there are various other factors like understanding of that content which you have read and its complexity should also be considered for getting maximum amount of information from that content. The director failed to mention whether Easy Read course subscription are convering those factors as well or not. Furthermore, the director mentioned that Easy Read course is giving free seminar for three weeks in Spruce City but he doesn't mentioned the location of their Acme Publishing company with respect to the city. It may be possible that the company is far more than Spruce city or may be in another city. We don't really know. If the that is the case, many employees end up wasting their precious time in going to that seminar and end up tired and thus the productivity of Acme publications may decline.
Furthermore, instead of spending 500$ on Easy Read course, the director may think of some other subscription which can benifit employees more than that which Easy Read subscription is giving. Possibly, some video subscription can be given to employees since most of the people has great higher ability to see rather than visualize.
In conclusion, the director's argument is unpersuasive as it seems. To bolster it futher, the author must provide more concrete evidence perhaps by the way of relibe survey about the exact number of companies and people which have enhanced their productivity only due to Easy Read subscription. Finally, to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about why the productivity enhances only after taking the subscription and not due to another ways.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The director claims that taking the Easy Read course by the employees benifited them greatly since it has enhanced the productivity of many companies.
Error: benifited Suggestion: benefited
Sentence: However, the word 'greatly' and 'many' doesn't convincingly show the exact amount of companies which are benifited and how much they're benifited.
Error: benifited Suggestion: benefited
Sentence: If the director have given the information about the exact number of companies which are benifited from Easy Read course subscription and the number of people benifited from them with resptect to the number of people who have wasted their efforts in the subscription, the claim holds a convincing position.
Error: resptect Suggestion: respect
Error: benifited Suggestion: benefited
Sentence: Scondly, the director is assuming that faster reading is the only factor due to which a person can absore more in a single day.
Error: absore Suggestion: absorb
Sentence: The director failed to mention whether Easy Read course subscription are convering those factors as well or not.
Error: convering Suggestion: covering
Sentence: Furthermore, instead of spending 500 on Easy Read course, the director may think of some other subscription which can benifit employees more than that which Easy Read subscription is giving.
Error: benifit Suggestion: benefit
Sentence: To bolster it futher, the author must provide more concrete evidence perhaps by the way of relibe survey about the exact number of companies and people which have enhanced their productivity only due to Easy Read subscription.
Error: relibe Suggestion: relive
Error: futher Suggestion: father
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 546 350
No. of Characters: 2704 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.834 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.952 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.656 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.132 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'several questions'.
Suggestion: several questions
...his claim, the director needs to answer several question which could make the argument more coge...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...apos;greatly' and 'many' doesnt convincingly show the exact amount of c...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...panies which are benifited and how much theyre benifited. Although, it could be possib...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 654, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...have taken the subscription or not. May be those guys were extraordinary with resp...
^^
Line 3, column 724, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ry with respect to the other people and thats why they were able to perform their tas...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 766, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: tasks
...ats why they were able to perform their tasks tasks quickly with respect to others. If the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 563, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...r for three weeks in Spruce City but he doesnt mentioned the location of their Acme Pu...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 747, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ruce city or may be in another city. We dont really know. If the that is the case, m...
^^^^
Line 7, column 34, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$500'.
Suggestion: $500
...ne. Furthermore, instead of spending 500$ on Easy Read course, the director may t...
^^^^
Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
... than visualize. In conclusion, the directors argument is unpersuasive as it seems. T...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, thus, well, in conclusion, by the way, first of all, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2781.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 542.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13099630996 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81516020373 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431734317343 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7025268045 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.428571429 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8095238095 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336640970554 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109297051612 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813862964814 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188772836015 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772313286422 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.