The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The letter to the editor of Parson City’s local newspaper talks about budgetary priorities of two cities which is the fund invested on the public schools for better education of students. The writer concluded that the Parsons City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do. I am not totally agreeing with the conclusion made upon fund collected by tax was double in Parson City than Blue City.
Moreover, it is explained in the letter that both cities have same number of residents, but it is not mentioned clearly that what is the criteria of tax payment. Every country has its own tax policy based on per capita income. About such important points about tax the writer had not mentioned due to which there is strong possibility that the Blue City has a smaller number of people who earn more which comes under taxable limit. That’s why the Parson City spent more fund as Blue City spent.
Additionally, all students don’t study in public schools. The Blue City may have more private schools than public schools and because of that fund spent on public schools were enough to run them properly. In the Parson City the students in public schools may more in number than private schools so they spent more fund on public schools. Before contrasting funds invested on public schools of two cities, the writer should consider number of public schools and strength of students studied there. Because comparison made between similar situations or things.
Furthermore, the writer mentioned that the Parson city spent more money on public schools and provides good education to students. To conclude the level of education on amount expanding on the school seems illogical without knowledge of other factors such as number of students, qualification of teachers, teaching skills of teachers, infrastructure of school and many more. The Blue City spent less amount than Parson City, but it does not mean that the education in Blue City’s public school is not good. There is strong possibility that the Blue City spent enough amount to run public schools effectively.
Conclusively, on the basis of aforementioned evidences it is clear that the argument has flaws and need to check the analysis. There are so many factors which should included before jumped to the conclusion about spending funds by both Cities.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1942 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.904 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.436 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.192 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 196, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich should included before jumped to the conclusion about spending funds by both ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08101265823 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56823433349 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450632911392 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0692695062 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371397971196 0.218282227539 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144678886732 0.0743258471296 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101829444705 0.0701772020484 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212845987203 0.128457276422 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111644333093 0.0628817314937 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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