The following appeared as a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
“Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Realty and Fitch Realty-Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents: in contrast,Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams’ revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch’s $144,000.Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty”
The writer of this analytical piece has drawn an conclusion with a very few amount of statistical data and overlooking the positive aspects of Fitch Realty firm compared to the Adams Realty firm.
Firstly, the homeowner stated that the Adams realty is superior. Homeowner might have failed to add the basis of superiority. Adams Realty is superior but in which context? It can be superior in dealing with customers or it may be superior in selling many schemes compared to the Fitch Realty. There is a lack of evidence and ample of assumption by the homeowner, which results into the fallacy.
Next, homeowner has given a data of the workers at both the firms. Irrespective of the quantity of the workers, the development is a result of the efficiency and quality of the workers. It may be possible that 40 employees working at the Adams Realty firm for full time completes equal work compared to the 25 employees, working part time at the Fitch Realty. The efficiency depends on many factors such as the ambience at the office, the leadership and group formations and may be the ability of the employees. This does not directly implies the conclusion which homeowner has stated. homeowner has failed to describe the external factors affecting the employees during their work.
In addition, homeowner has analyzed the revenue of both the firms which shows a major difference in both the firms. There are many factors related with the revenue of a firm. The number of applications at the firm is not mentioned. What if there are more number of customers at the Adams Realty compared to the Fitch Realty. Had it been the same number of customers, the statistical data tends to support the conclusion. But there was no mention of any such data, which weakens the homeowner conclusion as the homeowner may not have covered all the aspects.
homeowner compared the two firms at different interval of time. He/She shared his/her personal experience at both the firms but one experience was 10 years ago and another experience is just a year ago. There is a large difference of the time and there is no information about Adams Realty firm 10 years ago. In addition to that, homeowner is even unaware of the efficiency of the selling homes at Fitch Realty the previous year. There is no measurable data as both the experience occurred at different time. This can not support the conclusion as there is no common ground for this fact.
The conclusion stated by the homeowner that if one want to sell the home quickly and at a good price, one should approach to Adams Realty firm, does not clearly supported by the premises covered by him. There are so many flaws and lack of assumptions which clearly negates the homeowner’s point of view and directly attacks the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 478 350
No. of Characters: 2246 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.676 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.12 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.638 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...iter of this analytical piece has drawn an conclusion with a very few amount of st...
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Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun amount seems to be countable; consider using: 'few amounts'.
Suggestion: few amounts
...ece has drawn an conclusion with a very few amount of statistical data and overlooking the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...es working at the Adams Realty firm for full time completes equal work compared to the 25...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...k compared to the 25 employees, working part time at the Fitch Realty. The efficiency dep...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'imply'
Suggestion: imply
...f the employees. This does not directly implies the conclusion which homeowner has stat...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 587, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Homeowner
... conclusion which homeowner has stated. homeowner has failed to describe the external fac...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Homeowner
...ay not have covered all the aspects. homeowner compared the two firms at different int...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 162, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'support'
Suggestion: support
... to Adams Realty firm, does not clearly supported by the premises covered by him. There a...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, so, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 476.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85504201681 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66803331547 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420168067227 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1473359656 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8846153846 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3076923077 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.30769230769 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260384155071 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846100546204 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907731730974 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166379768513 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488737860946 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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