The argument claims that homeowners should choose Adams Realty because the firm is better than its counterpart, Fitch Realty. Stated in this way the argument: reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology and fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily states that Adams Realty has the number of employees larger than that of Fitch Realty and some of Fitch’s agents work only part-time. This statement is a stretch since the evidence does not show a clear advantage. To illustrate, Adams Realty has more excellent real estate agents who have earned a handsome income for the company than its opponent or the number of part-time agents of Fitch Realty account for how many percent of total agents or the number of Fitch’s agents is low due to recent cutoff. The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that the revenue of top ten sellers between two companies or the reason why Fitch has a smaller number of employees.
Second, the argument claims that Adams Realty has faster selling rate than its rival, Fitch Realty. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between selling rate of the company and reputation of a business. Moreover, the author compares the number between two different times, ten years ago and last year. If the argument had provided evidence indicating high selling rate and how it relates to the quality of the company such as then the argument would have been a lot more convincing. Suppose, for example, the company has a source of reliable consumers could pay a high price so that it both earns high income and has a faster rate of selling.
Finally, the author indicates that Adams’ earnings last year was two times as high as that of Fitch and also has higher average sales price. Does the number come from a trusted real estate magazine? Has Adams’ income been kept the same during the last ten years? Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts that support the current conclusion that between two real estate firms Adams Realty and Fitch Realty, the former is superior than the latter.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2169 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.885 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.482 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.663 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 320, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...nd Fitch Realty, the former is superior than the latter.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05630630631 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64272315517 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490990990991 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3070922226 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.157894737 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3684210526 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266046911673 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856016449625 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994600125507 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165018071534 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0735796994192 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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