Cutting corners to increase company’s performance, how classic. Sunnyside Apartments is doing all its dirty work under the name of environmental protection.
First, reducing water outlet performance is borderline legal, if it is. Without mentioning previous contracts between tenants and leasing company, I can’t safely assume functioning shower room is not listed in the contract. A judge can review the misfunctioning shower head which now only emits 1/3 of previous capacity, is in fully capable, robust operation state. Thus, rule in favor of the tenants. One party can’t single sided withdraw from a binding contract and modify something on their own interest.
Second, modification cost versus hydro bill changes may not appear as green on company’s income statement. The upfront labor and equipment for revise all shower heads is not given, and unknown, without further proof of price spikes for high intensity modification for all suites in the complex, I can’t judge how much sunk cost there will be. Then the water saved is still unknown. Like flushing a toilet, less water pressure only mean one thing, more time to fill a tank. A lesser showerhead may lead to longer shower time and unchanged water consumption. Two factors combined, not enough evidence the modification itself is profitable.
Third, the silent majority will not strike swiftly, but decisively. One month into action, only few complaints don’t mean everyone is happy. Complaining is a childish action, time consuming an no guaranteed results. Moving to a new location is definitive and serves justice and punishment. Any survey rely on passive information is selective blind in its native form. Very few complaints means an unknown amount of data source. Whether people are content with the new water flow is unknown. Combining with cost-benefit analysis, if bad shower head will lead to dissatisfaction and high vacancy rate, it won’t worth it.
Forth, profit equals revenue minuses cost. Cost side reduction doesn’t increase profit if all other factors are held constant. Without a comprehensive income-expenditure analysis, from how Sunnyside collects its income, there is just so much unknown. If Sunnyside relies heavily on selling soap, shampoo, bodywash and lotions, a less refreshing showerhead can drive all incomes to the roof. If Sunnyside is a heavily regulated, government subsidized, low-income housing support apartment, reduce service quality may mean less grant(income) next year. The author have to find more ways to save money, for example, resaching the consume of all services and not just water.
To conclude, the author's argument could be strengthened. Their argument providing more information, such as average life time that a shower lasts, and if it has been a change in alignment with the new policy. Moreover, the author's argument could further be singletoned is they provides more information about the customs of the rest of the clients and the use of other services such as electricity or gas. As it stands, however, the disagreement is flawed for the reasons indicated.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2523 1500
No. of Different Words: 296 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.138 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.786 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.839 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.804 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.484 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.218 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.449 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ng is a childish action, time consuming an no guaranteed results. Moving to a new ...
^^
Line 7, column 307, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'relies'.
Suggestion: relies
...rves justice and punishment. Any survey rely on passive information is selective bli...
^^^^
Line 7, column 434, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...means an unknown amount of data source. Whether people are content with the new water f...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 627, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...s to save money, for example, resaching the consume of all services and not just water. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 18, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...and not just water. To conclude, the authors argument could be strengthened. Their a...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 117, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...iding more information, such as average life time that a shower lasts, and if it has been...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 224, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ment with the new policy. Moreover, the authors argument could further be singletoned i...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 278, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...nt could further be singletoned is they provides more information about the customs of t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, then, third, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2653.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 487.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4476386037 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95701716537 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 204.123752495 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611909650924 0.468620217663 131% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 19.7664670659 157% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3554560311 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5806451613 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7096774194 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16129032258 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129403408093 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0293124644088 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036223391833 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0650934607577 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412485264697 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 158.0 98.500998004 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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