The person who wrote the letter believes that a mandatory driver's education course at Centerville High school will reduce the number of vehicle accidents in the area. They assume that the driving schools in Centerville are too costly for parents and that parents are generally too busy to teach their teenagers how to drive.
Although their point seems valid at a cursory glance, many other factors must be considered as well.
Firstly, the letter does not state at which magnitude teenage drivers are involved in the overall number of vehicular accidents in Centerville. If the number of teenage drivers involved in car accidents is insignificant such as 10% or 5% of total accidents, then a mandatory program at Centerville high school will not reduce the overall number of accidents and will not be a solution to the problem. Hence the magnitude in which teenage drivers are involved in these accidents should be considered.
Secondly, it is close-minded to assume that the implementation of a mandatory high school program is the only solution to the problem as there could be alternative solutions as well. It is good to identify the main cause of these accidents first. Is it due to the negligent behavior of drivers, or inexperience of drivers or is it due to something out of the drivers control such as the underdevelopment of roads, traffic lights, or pedestrian crossings ? If it is the latter, then the implementation of a program will not be a solution, the construction of new roads, and pedestrian crossings by the government will be a better solution.
Lastly, the letter also states that, “Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction”. It is good to identify the magnitude of parents that cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. If the majority of parents can afford it, then it is better for the high school to promote the driving instruction centers to students rather than produce a program that would be more costly and more time-consuming for the high school. They could perhaps use this money for more useful programs in the future. There is also a possibility of the program being more costly than the driving instruction centres as the highschool will have to bare costs such as hiring driving instructors and the costs of practical driving tests with students which will require a vehicle as well.
Hence all the above factors should be considered by the High school when making this decision.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2049 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.879 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.802 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.738 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'drivers'' or 'driver's'?
Suggestion: drivers'; driver's
...te the letter believes that a mandatory drivers education course at Centerville High sc...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 402, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... will not be a solution to the problem. Hence the magnitude in which teenage drivers ...
^^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...hich will require a vehicle as well. Hence all the above factors should be conside...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01904761905 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88584987413 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421428571429 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4006397704 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.75 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26872497055 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927745750865 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780577410393 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146071560046 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754956088662 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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