The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville."All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years several accidents in and around Centerville have inv

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The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.

"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."

The author contends that efficacious and mandatory program supported by the high school is the sole resolution to a recent car accidents by teenagers. The author states that since the teenagers' parents are busy and on a tight budget to afford a program off-campus driving program, the Centerville school's driving education should be implemented. While supporting the argument, the author relies on assumptions that are not taken for granted. Thus, further evidence needs to be propounded and corroborated in order to validate the author's claim.

Firstly, the author assumes that numerous accidents have been continuously arising for the past two years. However, it may not be the case. For the past two years, several accidents involving driving by teenagers might have happened at one time of the period. It could be that there was a sudden increase of drivers due to a festival going on temporarily, that made the congestion of traffic, and increased the number of accidents. Except for this time, there could have been mere number of accidents regarding teenagers' driving. Therefore, further evidence pertaining to whether how many accidents have happened for every single month should be examined in order to let author contend that the increased number of accidents should be mitigated with the effort of high school having driving program.

Secondly, the writer gives the accident's fault towards teenagers only. There could have been other causation for the teenagers' driving accidents. It could be that the adults have been driving in a violent manner. Then, even with the help of the high school's driving education, since adults are not being re-educated, the number of accidents would not likely to be mitigated. As such, more detailed evidence of whom the accident should be giving fault to should be validated in order to make the author's claim more valid.

Lastly, the author falsely assumes that the high school driving program is more beneficial to the family of the teenagers compared to the privately held driving education program. The families of the teenagers, who are on a tight budget for the other two driving schools, could be suffering financially more if they let their kids be educated from the high school. The Centerville high school's program is not examined to be efficacious to lessen the number of accidents. Although it is less costly compared to the private education of driving, the high school program could be not effective and pertain the number of accidents of teenage driving or even make it more. Thus, the overall cost for the accident, subsuming the prevention of the accident, would be far more when taking the Centerville high school's program. Therefore, the quality of Centerville high school's education should be examined.

In summary, the author's statement cannot be supported as in its current form. Further evidence pertaining to the number of accidents arising for every month, whom to blame for the driving accident, and the quality of the high school's education is crucial in determining the validity of the claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...whether how many accidents have happened for every single month should be examine...
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...ld be that the adults have been driving in a violent manner. Then, even with the help of the high s...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'except for', 'in summary']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231751824818 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.180656934307 0.15541462614 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0930656934307 0.0836205057962 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0529197080292 0.0520304965353 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.014598540146 0.0272364105082 54% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122262773723 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0839416058394 0.0416121511921 202% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.66680652969 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0310218978102 0.026700313972 116% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.116788321168 0.113004496875 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0310218978102 0.0255425247493 121% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0109489051095 0.0127820249294 86% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3080.0 2731.13054187 113% => OK
No of words: 498.0 446.07635468 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.18473895582 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.421686746988 0.378187486979 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.321285140562 0.287650121315 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.214859437751 0.208842608468 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.14859437751 0.135150697306 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66680652969 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 207.018472906 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411646586345 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.492678555 52.1807786196 89% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.652173913 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.172078 57.7814097925 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.913043478 141.986410481 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.652173913 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.695652173913 0.724660767414 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 53.7806879693 51.9672348444 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.76470588235 1.8405768891 96% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.53110445695 0.441005458295 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.137136226122 0.135418324435 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0868751849356 0.0829849096947 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.603797192525 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136738796354 0.147661913831 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.249005885288 0.193483328276 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774156891117 0.0970749176394 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.578381335711 0.42659136922 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0793651478442 0.0774707102158 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.41405189289 0.312017818177 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295011062909 0.0698173142475 42% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.87684729064 218% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 5.36822660099 224% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

argument 1 -- not OK. where did you get this: numerous accidents have been continuously arising for the past two years. ?

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- not exactly.
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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:

condition 1:
In the past two years several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. //your argument 2

condition 2:
Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. //maybe some parents are not busy or they have enough money

conclusion:
Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem. All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. //maybe there are probably superior alternative solutions. Perhaps some teenager simple have no desire to acquire drive license...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2526 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.072 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.603 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 156 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.652 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.425 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5