Claims: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
In the above statement, the author argues that the problems that heckle modern citizen cannot be solved by the legal system because laws cannot change what people have in mind. However, the following essay will contend that it is plausible to disagree with the author's claim.
Admittedly, people's innate characteristics are difficult to amend, since their traits have been with them for their whole lives. In addition, if the laws were to solve the problems that citizens in our society heckle with, no criminals would be extant. However, to whomever we ask, we can acknowledge that it is not the case. The same kind of problem arises intermittently. Even with the help of the law, incarcerating the criminal, we can easily see criminals committing crime again after they are emancipated from the jail. For example, a vicious criminal called "YoungChul You" in Korea, sexually harassed a woman and even killed her before being incarcerated. However, after years of incarceration, he soon commits the same kind of crime again. Therefore, it could be stated that legal system cannot change what people have in their mind.
However, we also have to admit, simultaneously, that the legal system is beneficial to our society. If it were not for the legal system, more of the criminals or problems we have been suffering from would have been extant or develop into more serious degree of the crime. For example, the sop among the upper echelon is now prevented in Korea due to a law called "Kim Young-Ran". The law circumscribes the amount of money that is allowable as a gift that goes around for the people who are in relation economically, politically, or socially that the counterpart is beneficial to oneself in someway. Before this law present in our society, the price of the gift, or sop, skyrocketed that it has been a heckle to the lower echelon in order to ingratiate the upper echelon. However, due to the law being constituted, people who give sop have decreased their financial concern. Therefore, we could state that the legal system decreases our degree of concern in our daily lives to some extent.
In addition, people are mostly subordinate to laws. The criminals are the few anomalies that exist in our society. Removing the anomalies, we see many people being pliant to the legal system. Many acknowledge that law is what is beneficial to everyone and believe that law is constituted to be applicable in generic society. If our values contradict with the legal system, we try to find faults to our values and happen to follow the legal system to prevent hassles between others. Therefore, people tend to follow the law in order to harmonize in their own community they are a member of.
In summary, I believe that the legal system can solve numerous problems in our modern society to some extent and prevent perilous happenings to develop from our current degree of problems. In addition, people who are mostly a member of some kind of society of their own tries to be harmonic with their members. Thus, they tend to follow the legal system that is promised to be kept by everyone categorically. Therefore, the legal system, law, is beneficial in that it moderates the degree of seriousness in problems that we suffer daily.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The topic is not about the advantages of laws, regarding the third paragraph. We can't treat claim and reason separately.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 550 350
No. of Characters: 2619 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.843 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.762 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.37 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.349 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.704 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.47 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...to disagree with the authors claim. Admittedly, peoples innate characteristi...
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...nge what people have in their mind. However, we also have to admit, simultan...
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... in our daily lives to some extent. In addition, people are mostly subordina...
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...own community they are a member of. In summary, I believe that the legal sys...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in summary', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209523809524 0.240241500013 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.168253968254 0.157235817809 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0809523809524 0.0880659088768 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0587301587302 0.0497285424764 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0634920634921 0.0444667217837 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.122222222222 0.12292977631 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0380952380952 0.0406280797675 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76421285853 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0428571428571 0.030933414821 139% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0888888888889 0.0997080785238 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0174603174603 0.0249443105267 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0190476190476 0.0148568991511 128% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3299.0 2732.02544248 121% => OK
No of words: 550.0 452.878318584 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99818181818 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36 0.366273622748 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.238181818182 0.280924506359 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176363636364 0.200843997647 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110909090909 0.132149295362 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76421285853 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 219.290929204 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429090909091 0.48968727796 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.1467312585 55.4138127331 90% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6194690265 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.3703703704 23.380412469 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2456075589 59.4972553346 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.185185185 141.124799967 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3703703704 23.380412469 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.37037037037 0.674092028746 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 44.1885521886 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.27322404372 1.64882698954 77% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347532023306 0.391690518653 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0999898471912 0.123202303941 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0585536501224 0.077325440228 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.508828449555 0.547984918172 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139557676628 0.149214159877 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135663641073 0.161403998019 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804037333756 0.0892212321368 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.562320927179 0.385218514788 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0631535324443 0.0692045440612 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267940765699 0.275328986314 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519468235117 0.0653680567796 79% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.30420353982 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.66592920354 218% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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