1. As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reas

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1. As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The author states that humans will have hard time thinking and solving problems by themselves due to the advent of technology. In some sense, it surely is true. However, as technology develops, other problems also arises as well. This is when the already-developed technologies have to step aside and humans have to make ways to remove the problem and devise new technologies. Therefore, the advent of technology will not let humans' independent thinking ability to deteriorate.

The relentless technology being introduced in our world has been a big help to human beings. For example, the technology that helped us in our daily lives is the calculator and the internet. From the youngsters to the old, calculator is an easy equipment that anyone could easily use. Kids in the kindergarten and elementary school, when they have a Math homework, they tend to use calculators instead of utilizing their thinking skills. Also, people in the working field also utilizes the calculators to check the accounting of their company or calculating the exact price they have to pay in the market, and etc. In addition, although the internet allowed us to save time looking for certain information, it has side effects. In the past, we tend to utilize the encyclopedia. As we go over the encyclopedia, we had a chance to look at other knowledge as well and broaden our knowledge. Therefore, we could say that technology deteriorated our thinking skills in some ways.

However, the advent and development of technology does not solely deteriorates human's ability to think. We can easily see that new equipments are introduced in the market day by day, with advanced function. As technology opens humans' opportunities to a whole new world, there arises new problems to solve. As stated above, for instance, the internet allowed us to save time. This makes humans to utilize more time thinking by themselves and to use time efficiently. With more time for humans, we deal with many problems due to the development of technology. For example, the cloning in the Biology industry has made a sensation in our world from the past years. However, this caused so many problems such as two headed cows. Then it is the scientists' job to solve the problem and make a perfect cloning technology. Also, not only in the Science field, cloning has also made a sociological sensation in ethical ways, which leads to full of debate, making people to think over and over again regarding cloning issues. Moreover, although we have "super computers" to forecast the weather exactly, it is full of mistakes. It predicted that tomorrow we will have no rain, but we easily face our way home without an umbrella with a sudden rain that the computer could not predict. So, although the technology has developed consistently, our world is never perfect. Therefore, technology will not deteriorate humans' thinking skills.

Therefore, in a short term, we could feel that the advent of technology has made our lives easier and at the same time make humans' thinking ability to go down. However, when we see in a more longer term, the technology, which made our lives easier at the immediate moment, binds ourselves into a more complicated technological issues. In conclusion, the technologies developed will cause problems and eventually require human's comprehensive knowledge and thinking skills.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy equipment'.
Suggestion: easy equipment
...he youngsters to the old, calculator is an easy equipment that anyone could easily use. Kids in t...
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Line 3, column 607, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...t price they have to pay in the market, and etc. In addition, although the internet allo...
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Line 5, column 67, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'deteriorate'
Suggestion: deteriorate
...velopment of technology does not solely deteriorates humans ability to think. We can easily ...
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Line 5, column 1437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not deteriorate humans thinking skills. Therefore, in a short term, we could fee...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'longer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: longer
...y to go down. However, when we see in a more longer term, the technology, which made our li...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'look', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234920634921 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.157142857143 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0746031746032 0.0880659088768 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.068253968254 0.0497285424764 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0571428571429 0.0444667217837 129% => OK
Prepositions: 0.101587301587 0.12292977631 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0301587301587 0.0406280797675 74% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92264848662 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0396825396825 0.030933414821 128% => OK
Particles: 0.0015873015873 0.0016655270985 95% => OK
Determiners: 0.0920634920635 0.0997080785238 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015873015873 0.0249443105267 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00952380952381 0.0148568991511 64% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3373.0 2732.02544248 123% => OK
No of words: 553.0 452.878318584 122% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09945750452 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.361663652803 0.366273622748 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278481012658 0.280924506359 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209764918626 0.200843997647 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144665461121 0.132149295362 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92264848662 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 219.290929204 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457504520796 0.48968727796 93% => OK
Word variations: 54.1005456472 55.4138127331 98% => OK
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6194690265 150% => OK
Sentence length: 17.8387096774 23.380412469 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.534307052 59.4972553346 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.806451613 141.124799967 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8387096774 23.380412469 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.483870967742 0.674092028746 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 45.6868109432 51.4728631049 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.29775280899 1.64882698954 79% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.492789000974 0.391690518653 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0957837904755 0.123202303941 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.082424756796 0.077325440228 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.439122423471 0.547984918172 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153178301361 0.149214159877 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176536532089 0.161403998019 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081904474189 0.0892212321368 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.504582745189 0.385218514788 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0657856582272 0.0692045440612 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.377614795184 0.275328986314 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456013859401 0.0653680567796 70% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 7.22455752212 180% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.66592920354 218% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 25.0 13.5995575221 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Kids in the kindergarten and elementary school, when they have a Math homework, they tend to use calculators instead of utilizing their thinking skills.
Kids in the kindergarten and elementary school, when they have a Math homework, tend to use calculators instead of utilizing their thinking skills.

Also, people in the working field also utilizes the calculators
Also, people in the working field also utilize the calculators

does not solely deteriorates human's ability
does not solely deteriorate human's ability

flaws:
1. Better always support one side.

2. Don't put a lot of examples in one paragraph. It is better to have three paragraphs in the essay body.

We like this pattern:

paragraph 1: introduction. Suppose we support side A.

paragraph 2: reason 1 + why reason 1 + example of reason 1 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1).

paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example of reason 2 + a small conclusion (like advantages of reason 2 or comparisons if not reason 2).

paragraph 4: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side B. First, ... Second, .... However, there is no causation/relation.... I still support side A...

paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 553 350
No. of Characters: 2728 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.849 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.933 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.786 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.433 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.64 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.633 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.403 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5