The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The article about planning for retirement talks about Utopian township named Clearview. Clearview has spectacular natural beauty, consistent climate, less price from last years and different promises about improvement in schools, streets and public services and finally number of physicians. The article presents everything seems to be perfect and the argument appears convincing but when we go through its detailed analyses, we found reasoning which proves it weaken.
Moreover, after retirement people want to live with family and for family the town should be near to school, workplace, medical services and market. There is no indication of location of the town in the given article. If we suppose it will not be too far from important places, then Clearview's mayor's promises are forcing to think about the location and facilities. He promised to implement many new improvement programs in the town and there is no time limit when these programs will run properly. In age of retirement the people crossed 60 years of age which makes them tired from working. The city should have basic facilities to give comfort and mental support instead of secluding them from others.
Furthermore, the housing cost in Clearview have fallen significantly in comparison of last years and taxes are also lower than neighboring towns. it is another advantage according to writer of the given article which is also not appropriate. Decline in cost does not mean affordable price. It may be plausible that housing cost decreased in last years but still it is very high and for a retiree it is difficult to buy such costly house. One more important point to consider is taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns also seems to be very convincing but there is no evidences or statistical data which makes the statement stronger.
Finally, they mentioned that in Clearview the number of physicians is greater than the national average. It is absolutely true that in old age medical services become important, but the presence of physicians does not indicate good health care services. There should be well equipped hospital and ambulance services to reach faster for emergency. In the Clearview there is no evidence for hospitality services so, it is also not appropriate point to convince retirees to buy houses in Clearview.
In summary, the given argument is not convincing and aforementioned points make weaken the argument. The Clearview can be utopian as the writer want but for it, they must work and provide basic services before promising the benefits.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2101 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.075 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.663 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.789 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.661 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 462, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'weakens'?
Suggestion: weakens
...ses, we found reasoning which proves it weaken. Moreover, after retirement people w...
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Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'thinking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: thinking
... Clearviews mayors promises are forcing to think about the location and facilities. He p...
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Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... are also lower than neighboring towns. it is another advantage according to write...
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Line 5, column 567, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no evidences'?
Suggestion: there are no evidences
...ns also seems to be very convincing but there is no evidences or statistical data which makes the sta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, well, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19082125604 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73791284954 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531400966184 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7544782815 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.45 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226207836628 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655188167839 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063788001629 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125352577946 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569357686125 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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