The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
An memorandum has appeared in the local magazine which tout about the future retirement in Clearview and delineates why one should consider Clearview as the best place to retire. Further, there are many advantageous points which has been listed in the current andersoment and one can easily assesnce to such lucurative offer, but carefully scrutinizing the same it seems there are many puncholes and flaws that need to be answerd before one can actually totally agree.
Firstly, as the magazine describes that the Clearview has a spectacular nature and consistent climate which seems a selling point at first glance but further it describes that there has been a significant fall in the costs of housing in Cleaview which seems dubious, as if in any place which facilitates you with such eco-friendly nature environment, such place is always in demand and the demand grows as the year progresses, but it seems that the situation represneted is quite the opposite of it, further, the taxes remains lower as compared to its nearest neighborhood towns which is another point which seems vague as the reason has not been justified and one could surmise many assumptions, such as, is this a part of the selling plan of the government so that once the majority or a certain landmark property has been sold the government can revise the new tax policy. The given information does not includes any statistics regarding the reason for shuch curtaling in the cost of property and neither any survey has been taken place for justifying the reason for such low taxe rate, inorder to make these selling points more amenable the magazine needs to provide more information and justification.
Secondly, the mayor of the Clearview city is promising to add new programs to improve the basic necessities such as schools, streets and public services, as if now its just a promise and there is no conceret proof that such promises would be fullfilled or how many years it would take the mayor to fullfill such promises, for now everything is dwindling on a promise, in order to buttress such promises the magazine should provide some road map and timeline for such improvement or development where one can be well assured with the future development scope. There is no conculsive proof given and must be included for better understandability of what is the future development scope.
last but not the least, Clearview city has many excellent health cares and the number of physicians are many more as compared to national average, its a vital point for many eldery that they keep themeself active and healthy as the time passes but its not necessary that they are specifically looking for a physicians for such healthy life, it can be a case where most of them are quite tradional follower and belief in early morning jogging and yoga to keep their body healthy and does'nt require a physcians for such mundane activity. It's highly possible that one is not looking for such facilities and might not impact their consideration part when ruminating on whether to settle after retiremnet.
Summing up, to strengthen such selling point more information must be provided and a better time line should be proposed for furture developments.
Comments
e-rater score report
Sentence: Further, there are many advantageous points which has been listed in the current andersoment and one can easily assesnce to such lucurative offer, but carefully scrutinizing the same it seems there are many puncholes and flaws that need to be answerd before one can actually totally agree.
Error: puncholes Suggestion: punches
Error: answerd Suggestion: answer
Error: assesnce Suggestion: absence
Error: andersoment Suggestion: anders cent
Error: lucurative Suggestion: lucrative
Sentence: Firstly, as the magazine describes that the Clearview has a spectacular nature and consistent climate which seems a selling point at first glance but further it describes that there has been a significant fall in the costs of housing in Cleaview which seems dubious, as if in any place which facilitates you with such eco-friendly nature environment, such place is always in demand and the demand grows as the year progresses, but it seems that the situation represneted is quite the opposite of it,
Error: eco-friendly Suggestion: friendly
Error: represneted Suggestion: represented
Sentence: The given information does not includes any statistics regarding the reason for shuch curtaling in the cost of property and neither any survey has been taken place for justifying the reason for such low taxe rate, inorder to make these selling points more amenable the magazine needs to provide more information and justification.
Error: inorder Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: taxe Suggestion: take
Error: shuch Suggestion: shut
Error: curtaling Suggestion: curtain
Sentence: Secondly, the mayor of the Clearview city is promising to add new programs to improve the basic necessities such as schools, streets and public services, as if now its just a promise and there is no conceret proof that such promises would be fullfilled or how many years it would take the mayor to fullfill such promises, for now everything is dwindling on a promise, in order to buttress such promises the magazine should provide some road map and timeline for such improvement or development where
Error: conceret Suggestion: concert
Error: timeline Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: fullfilled Suggestion: fulfilled
Error: fullfill Suggestion: fulfill
Sentence: There is no conculsive proof given and must be included for better understandability of what is the future development scope.
Error: conculsive Suggestion: conclusive
Sentence: last but not the least, Clearview city has many excellent health cares and the number of physicians are many more as compared to national average, its a vital point for many eldery that they keep themeself active and healthy as the time passes but its not necessary that they are specifically looking for a physicians for such healthy life, it can be a case where most of them are quite tradional follower and belief in early morning jogging and yoga to keep their body healthy and does'nt require a
Error: tradional Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: eldery Suggestion: elder
Error: themeself Suggestion: themes
Error: yoga Suggestion: you
Sentence: physcians for such mundane activity.
Error: physcians Suggestion: physicians
Sentence: It's highly possible that one is not looking for such facilities and might not impact their consideration part when ruminating on whether to settle after retiremnet.
Error: ruminating Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: retiremnet Suggestion: retirement
Sentence: Summing up, to strengthen such selling point more information must be provided and a better time line should be proposed for furture developments.
Error: furture Suggestion: future
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 539 350
No. of Characters: 2644 1500
No. of Different Words: 259 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.818 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.905 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.686 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.279 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.641 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'A' instead of 'An' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: A
An memorandum has appeared in the local ma...
^^
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...of it, further, the taxes remains lower as compared to its nearest neighborhood to...
^^
Line 3, column 908, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'include'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: include
... policy. The given information does not includes any statistics regarding the reason for...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 908, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'include'
Suggestion: include
... policy. The given information does not includes any statistics regarding the reason for...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...condly, the mayor of the Clearview city is promising to add new programs to improve the basi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...sing to add new programs to improve the basic necessities such as schools, streets and public ser...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Last
...hat is the future development scope. last but not the least, Clearview city has m...
^^^^
Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... the number of physicians are many more as compared to national average, its a vit...
^^
Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...y more as compared to national average, its a vital point for many eldery that they...
^^^
Line 7, column 306, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a physician' or simply 'physicians'?
Suggestion: a physician; physicians
... that they are specifically looking for a physicians for such healthy life, it can be a case...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 483, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...and yoga to keep their body healthy and doesnt require a physcians for such mundane ac...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 11.1786427146 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2687.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 538.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99442379182 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73634799776 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485130111524 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 22.8473053892 258% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 238.834722541 57.8364921388 413% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 298.555555556 119.503703932 250% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.7777777778 23.324526521 256% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.8888888889 5.70786347227 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223741714224 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988824420735 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497254970933 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12042370937 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190453539823 0.0628817314937 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.0 14.3799401198 223% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.59 48.3550499002 24% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 12.197005988 216% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.55 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.32208582834 123% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.6 11.1389221557 230% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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