The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the magazine article states that Clearview would be a fascinating place for the public to spend their post-retirement days, but while making this assertion he/she takes into numerous assumptions which might not hold true. Following are three assumptions which might degrade the author's assertion.
First of all, the author states that the housing costs in Clearview have fallen considerably in past year, so this trend will continue this year as well. But, there is no sufficient information provided on how this trend will continue in future as well. Maybe the price reduction which took place last year was just a statistical anomaly or just a regression, and might not happen again. What if the prices, instead of going down, rises in future? This would turn out be a terrible circumstance for the people who have opted to live in Clearview. Thus, these speculations made by the author regarding the prices fails to hold true, and it would not be a best practice to opt for living in an area where the consistency in prices does not exist. Therefore, the author's claim regarding the price reduction does not hold water.
Second of all, the author states that, Clearview's Mayor have made promises to launch a numerous new programs to improve schools, streets and other public services. However, what are the chances that these promises would be full-filled? It is normal for a demagogues to make false promises before the elections, and which are in fact not feasible in practical scenarios. Maybe, the infrastructure, instead of developing as per Mayor's promise, worsens. Thus, there is need for evidence that, these promises made by the Mayor are practical and would be full-filled in the coming future. However, the author does not provide any supporting information regarding this, therefore his/her claim regarding the infrastructure development is frivolous.
Finally, the author states that, there are a lot of physicians residing (compared to the national average) in that and it would helpful for general public. While this claim looks promising, but there's no sufficient data provided regarding the medical facilities and infrastructure. Just having an abundant physicians does not mean that the general health care of that area is exceptional. What if the the people getting sick need modern sophisticated medical facilities which might not be present in Clearview, and in that case the patient would be shifted to hospital in the nearby place where that facility is present. This will put the lives in jeopardy, as the time taken in shifting might turn fatal. Consequently, the author's argument is not valid in general scenario.
In conclusion, the author have made numerous assumptions regarding the cost reduction, promises of development and medical facilities available in the area. However, these arguments are lacking substantial evidences regarding their practical feasibility. Therefore as a whole author's claim that Clearview would be great place to enjoy retirement is not valid.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 485 350
No. of Characters: 2479 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.693 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.111 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.755 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.208 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.563 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 293, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ree assumptions which might degrade the authors assertion. First of all, the aut...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...might degrade the authors assertion. First of all, the author states that the...
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Line 3, column 657, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...fails to hold true, and it would not be a best practice to opt for living in an a...
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Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'program'?
Suggestion: program
... made promises to launch a numerous new programs to improve schools, streets and other p...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a demagogue' or simply 'demagogues'?
Suggestion: a demagogue; demagogues
... would be full-filled? It is normal for a demagogues to make false promises before the elect...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...astructure development is frivolous. Finally, the author states that, there a...
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Line 7, column 143, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...verage in that and it would helpful for general public. While this claim looks promising, but ...
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Line 7, column 197, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
.... While this claim looks promising, but theres no sufficient data provided regarding t...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'physician'?
Suggestion: physician
...infrastructure. Just having an abundant physicians does not mean that the general health c...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...re of that area is exceptional. What if the the people getting sick need modern sophist...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...re of that area is exceptional. What if the the people getting sick need modern sophist...
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Line 7, column 727, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ing might turn fatal. Consequently, the authors argument is not valid in general scenar...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt is not valid in general scenario. In conclusion, the author have made nume...
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Line 9, column 261, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... regarding their practical feasibility. Therefore as a whole authors claim that Clearview...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2545.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 483.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26915113872 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82589811214 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 774.9 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1698384192 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.041666667 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135191861408 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389810538352 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480563277258 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905730190352 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362002329232 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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