The director of a large group of hospitals, stated that use of the Ultra clean hand soaps throughout the hospital is more beneficial than the use of liquid hand soaps as it helps in preventing people from serious health infections. In order to buttress his/her argument the memo adduced by providing the data which states 40% greater reduction in harmful bacteria than currently used liquid soaps in controlled laboratory as well as, due to the use of ultraclean, there are exiguous amount of cases of patient infection than other hospitals. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, there are certain quandaries that needs to be addressed.
First of all, memo suggests the result of comparison between two ultraclean and liquid soaps which are tested under a laboratory temperature, so the result might vary when it is tested on the true living circumstances. So, the effectiveness and impact cannot be fully determined by this result. For example, in lab before performing any kind of test laboratory temperature are maintained, apparatus are sterilized and incubation zone are created, hence harmful bacteria might be resistant to such situation whereas if such bacteria are found on the environment then it might act differently, then result might be unpersuasive.
Secondly, author ascribes another the fact that fewer cases of infection due to the effectiveness of ultraclean soaps in their hospitals as compared to other hospitals but many other factors remained unexamined. It is plausible that there hospitals might have fewer patients than other hospitals so there is less infection. Similarly, there hospital might have less number of immunocompromised person who are perhaps resistant to such kind of bacteria and hence less infection. Therefore, major causes behind the fewer cases might be some other reason as well.
In addition to this, the memo also indicates that the test are done mostly between the hospital staffs and visitors right after the use of soap and this might be contradictory from the data he has stated. As, we are all wary about the fact that cleaning our hands carefully even with the clean water will kill half number of bacteria and microscopic organisms present. Perhaps, if the above statement is true than the memo suggested by the director doesn't hold any water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now is completely flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author, is able to all the perplexities stated above and offer more pellucid evidence(perhaps in more systematic flow of research, then it would be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to switch from liquid soaps to ultra clean soaps.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2243 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.086 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.834 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.748 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.331 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 484, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...e use of ultraclean, there are exiguous amount of cases of patient infection than othe...
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Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aclean and liquid soaps which are tested under a laboratory temperature, so the r...
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Line 4, column 449, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...than the memo suggested by the director doesnt hold any water. In conclusion, the arg...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21640091116 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91870042466 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519362186788 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 727.2 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.0357443749 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.666666667 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2666666667 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8 5.70786347227 207% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222974671979 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689118646352 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763085396526 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120102968686 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838735012553 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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