In this statement the director asserted that If new houses for students are built, the College enrollment will increase, claimed the reason that the domitries now are not adequate for the students duo to the uprising number of new students while the off-campus renting is increasing too. It is a good will that the director suggest to the Collge to offer new house to students, however, there are no ovbious relavance between the conclusion and reasons. From the conclusion there are many factors can make more erollments, while from the reasons there are obsecure justifications, which could not make clear whether there is the emergence of buliding new domitries.
Let's begin from the conclusion that the good will of more enrollment of new students. A college which is the place to teach students should take the quality of teaching at first place.
If the college is excellent at teaching and researching, I believe there will be more an more students want to apply for, and a new administration office with high-efficient and impassionate officials will be required instead of new domitries. The new domitries, however, just a peripheral selection which will birng some good impression to the new students. For the students who want to study well in a good college, the living conditon would not be the first thing he/she should consider.
As I concern, the director's putting the plan of building new houses prior to enhancing teaching quality is an arbitrary consideration. Whatever the college is , theaching quality is the most important to them.When the college is famous with good teachers and excellent students with high-education. The new bulding plan will make more sense then.
When talk about the new houses for students, let's discuss the claims from the direcotor who said the enrollment will double in 50 years due to the current now. It's unpredictble of the erollment for 50 years later with the situation now. There is no relavance data which can prove this current will maintain like interest of money in the bank which we saved. It is too long to predict the situation later.The college cannot make new building plans with this prediction. Moreover, the author told us the average rent for apartment in the town has risen. But he didn't told us to what extent the increase is, so it would not be assure that the students could not afford the rent.
In conclusion , I suggest the author should take more survey.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 1982 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.799 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.675 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... domitries now are not adequate for the students duo to the uprising number of new stude...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...emergence of buliding new domitries. Lets begin from the conclusion that the good...
^^^^
Line 4, column 87, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...searching, I believe there will be more an more students want to apply for, and a ...
^^
Line 6, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f building new houses prior to enhancing teaching quality is an arbitrary conside...
^^
Line 6, column 160, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y consideration. Whatever the college is , theaching quality is the most important...
^^
Line 6, column 211, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: When
...g quality is the most important to them.When the college is famous with good teacher...
^^^^
Line 6, column 343, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...e new bulding plan will make more sense then. When talk about the new houses for ...
^^^^
Line 8, column 405, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...too long to predict the situation later.The college cannot make new building plans ...
^^^
Line 8, column 560, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...apartment in the town has risen. But he didnt told us to what extent the increase is,...
^^^^^
Line 10, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d not afford the rent. In conclusion , I suggest the author should take more s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98288508557 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71666895201 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471882640587 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2879260258 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.222222222 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192671211766 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661943860815 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458676010421 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109428621701 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446999993083 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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