The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of Brindleburg to the city council.
"Two years ago, the town of Seaside Vista opened a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. Since then, the Seaside Vista Tourism Board has reported a 20% increase in visitors. In addition, local banks reported a steep rise in the number of new business loan applications they received this year. The amount of tax money collected by Seaside Vista has also increased, allowing the town to announce plans to improve Seaside Vista's roads and bridges. We recommend building a similar golf course and resort hotel in Brindleburg. We predict that this project will generate additional tax revenue that the city can use to fund much-needed public improvements."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the memo, the mayor of Brindleburg`s claim that they recommend building a similar golf course and resort hotel for generating additional tax revenue rests on three assumptions. In order to evaluate the argument, we need to observe whether the assumptions are valid or not.
Firstly, mentioning that Brindleburg recommends building a similar golf course and resort hotel like Seaside Vista, he assumes that Brindlrburg also has positive results if it implements the same policy that the town of Seaside Vista implemented. In order to assess his assumption, we need to answer the following question: is it possible for Brindleburg to gain the same results if it implements the same policy? For example, if there have been already many golf courses and resorts in Brindleburg, it would have been hard for the new plan to success. If that, the author`s claim will be invalid. Otherwise, the author`s claim will be valid.
Secondly, he said that after the plan implements in the town of Seaside Vista, it has reported a 20% increase in visitors. It presumes that the plan may help to increase the rate of visitors. In order to evaluate his presumption, we need to answer the following question: is the cause of increasing the rate of visitors the construction of golf courses and resorts? If the town sales tickets, more visitors could tend to visit. If the critical factor that affects increasing the visitors may be not the plan but low price, the author`s claim will be unpersuasive. Otherwise, the author`s assertion will be convincing.
Lastly, he indicates that the number of new business loan applications are increased dramatically according to local bank reports this year. It assumes that the increase in loan applications may be caused by business growth. In order to appraise his assumption, we need to answer the following question: is the growth of new business loan applications good? If golf courses and resorts have had few customers, the loan applications would have increased. That is, it is hard to know whether the business grows through just the number of loan applications. If the cause of applying loan applications is the debt by business fail, the author`s claim will be unconvincing.
In conclusion, in order to assess the author`s argument, we need to ask several questions. If the answers to the questions are affirmative, the author`s recommendation will be valid. Otherwise, it will not be valid.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 1964 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.91 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.791 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.06 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.536 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he author's claim will be valid. Secondly, he said that after the plan im...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2325 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13862629187 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.42 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6457474576 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1363636364 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191740666548 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056723037501 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768077787376 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109492724679 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682398206835 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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