The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a
company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of
high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now
that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should
sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since
our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up
customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in
each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher
prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will
increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate
the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the
argument.
The new vice president of Sartorian company recommends reproducing overcoats which are mainly made by high quality wool fabric. Five years ago the company was forced to stop making them due to lack of supplies of wool. Nowadays, a new fabric supplier is found, so Sartorian company has high chances to achieve a success in overcoats. Although revitalizing overcoat production line seems feasible, it is filled with fallacies and poor evidences that makes the Sartorian SEO uncertain to accept it.
First of all, avaiblibility of a new fabric supplier cannot guarantee a warm acceptance from people to buy alpaca overcoat. On one hand, the dearth of overcoats may create the need among people who are willing to wear those Alpaca overcoats. On the other hand, the long absence from markets probably forced people to migrate to other brands to buy overcoats. This dichotomy put the possible success of Sartorian at stake so the new vice president has to study the market and buyers specifications in detail before proposing any revolutionary ideas. To provide such an evidence the company can hire market researchers to prepare comprehensive reports.
Secondly, the Fashion and generally the habits and interests of people toward the clothes are changing almost month by month which indicates that vice president’s expectation hardly come true. A brand of overcoat whose production halted for five years undoubtedly expelled from people’s mind. As a matter of fact, the shoppers rarely reject prefer old fashioned models when presented new ones. Therefore, Sartorian company needs concrete evidence from the realm of fashion to support vice president claim.
Finally, another weakness of this recommendation is that vice president wrongly put himself in customer’s shoes. He believes that they are happy with new price of Alpaca overcoat and buy them without any complain because the prices of other types of clothing also increased during the last five years. However, there is no such evidence to prove that people are willingly pay more prices for an old fashioned overcoat which was absent from the stores for a great deal of time. Another factor is the possible presence of new companies trying to attract more customers with cheaper prices. Thus, the vice president’s suggestive plan is not complete until he stops judging about people and begin observing their behaviors in real life.
All in all, the lack of enough evidence makes policy makers uncertain to accept vice president’s proposal about reluanching Alpaca overcoart. The proposal does not assure a warm acceptance from buyers who try to move along the fashions trends. Besides, It must be free of bias toward the idea that most people would embrace Alpaca overcoats and pay high prices for them when they presented when newer, more beautiful and more fashion friendly clothes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e to lack of supplies of wool. Nowadays, a new fabric supplier is found, so Sarto...
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Line 3, column 475, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eeds concrete evidence from the realm of fashion to support vice president claim....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, as to, as a matter of fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2414.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 458.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27074235808 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77410833361 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548034934498 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5964404957 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.952380952 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8095238095 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200503063535 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644170520412 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455287410176 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119781212846 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433229492588 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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