The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing."Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. This demand and the overall increase in clothing prices will make Sartorian's alpaca overcoats more profitable than ever before."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
it seems axiomatic that resuming the production of alpaca coats. To justify this argument, the new vice president of sartorian cites that pent-up demand is expected since none of their competitors offers a comparable product, and the fact that alpaca overcoat was popular five years ago, when they are able to obtain reliable supplies. While supporting this argument, however, the vice president of sartorian make several assumptions that cannot be taken for granted.
As a threshold matter, this argument hastily assumes that the demand regarding the alpaca overcoat is significant to date. Although this might be the case, it is possible that the demand toward the alpaca overcoat is not significant. The fact that none of their competitors offers a comparable product do not indicate that pent-up demand is present. perhaps majority of people bought another coat to persevere cold weather in the region. thus, though no comparable products (other alpaca coat) is present, it is possible that the demand is totally change in respect of supply-demand curve. Moreover, overall increase of the cost can occur bad influence on the demand. therefore, the demand toward the alpaca coat might not be as significant as the new vice president think. Hence, if this assumption prove unwarranted, then the argument proposed cannot be persuasive.
Even conceding that the pent-up demand is present, this argument is still vulnerable in that it relies on an unpersuasive assumption: the costs of the supplies of high quality wool fabric is similar in respect to the cost from five years ago. this might be the case, however, it is possible that the cost of the supplies surged significantly. if the cost is much higher than that from five years ago, than there are two choices that sartorian can make: to raise the total cost of alpaca overcoat, or to reduce the profit that they make buy selling each alpaca overcoat. regarding the fact that the demand of the alpaca overcoat is sensitive toward the cost of the product, raising the total cost can occur the contraction of demand, but reducing the profit cannot help the alpaca overcoat to be more profitable than ever. thus, if this situations occur, it is unlikely to occur expected results.
Finally, the vice president unfairly posits that the environment and climate of the region or the realm to date is same with that from five years ago. however, it can be proved unwarranted, since the annual climate of the region can change significantly. perhaps overcoat is useless since the overall temperature is higher than ever. In this regard, the demand toward the overcoat is in nadir than ever.
In sum, since numerous assumptions that are unwarranted are applied to the argument, it remains fragile in its form. therefore, vice president should consider about the assumptions that have made by himself/herself, in order to strengthen the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 475 350
No. of Characters: 2358 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.668 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.964 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.561 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.644 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.652 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... that cannot be taken for granted. As a threshold matter, this argument has...
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...ent proposed cannot be persuasive. Even conceding that the pent-up demand i...
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...nlikely to occur expected results. Finally, the vice president unfairly pos...
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...he overcoat is in nadir than ever. In sum, since numerous assumptions that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, still, then, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 474.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21729957806 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69594912407 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428270042194 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 2.70958083832 406% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3187983801 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.409090909 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5454545455 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104099751728 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329387160703 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494477622914 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684484874221 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417872612554 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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