Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
one would say that government funding of the arts is crucial for the realm of art to flourish. In some respects, it seems true that many governments around the world to date have a whole department about the cultural, artistic aspects of the nation, which also serves funding programs. From my perspective, however, government funding of the arts can harm the integrity of the arts.
Admittedly, it is undeniable that some funding toward the realm of art can flourish and be available to all people. since it is essential for artists spread their arts, all the financial problems can be occurred regarding this. For instance, many exhibitions are funded from various foundations including the government, since it is crucial for them to advertise and to run the building where it is being hold. thus, for artists who are not as much wealthy as to pay all the bills regarding this openings, one should be supported financially. it is axiomatic that the more such places related to arts, the more arts flourish. therefore, government funding of the arts is somewhat advantageous for arts to flourish.
Yet, this does not necessarily mean that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish. since many artists are impecunious in the past, they made such beautiful products that had been originated from internal emotions such as sorrow. since it is believed that only arts contained with creators' internal feelings is regarded as true arts, funding cannot help for the incarnation of these emotions. thus, giving government funding without any considerations cannot flourish the arts, because the arts produced solely by funding cannot or little help the development of the contemporary arts. therefore, it can be regarded that the government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
The chief reason for my disagreement against the latter argument of the statement lies on the empirical proof. since the government is giving the funding, they can control the receiver, which lead to significant problem as described below:
A striking example is present, that the blacklist of the artists in Korea had been presented until several years ago, which indicates that by controlling the government funding toward the arts can control the thoughts and ideas of the artists, so that they made artists not to produce arts which is controversial to the contemporary government. thus, by funding artists and choosing whom to be funded, government can control artists, which should be forbidden. therefore, it can be said that the funding threaten the integrity of the arts.
To sum up, it is actually a complex issue, and thus any easy answers are present. Despite funding the arts by government is somewhat advantageous in some respects, it is revealed that it is not in general. All in all, it can be concluded that the government funding of the arts can harm the pureness of the arts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
one would say that government funding of th...
^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can harm the integrity of the arts. Admittedly, it is undeniable that some f...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...lourish and be available to all people. since it is essential for artists spread thei...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...un the building where it is being hold. thus, for artists who are not as much wealth...
^^^^
Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...althy as to pay all the bills regarding this openings, one should be supported finan...
^^^^
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...s, one should be supported financially. it is axiomatic that the more such places ...
^^
Line 5, column 627, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...elated to arts, the more arts flourish. therefore, government funding of the arts is some...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t advantageous for arts to flourish. Yet, this does not necessarily mean that...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...y to ensure that the arts can flourish. since many artists are impecunious in the pas...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 270, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
... from internal emotions such as sorrow. since it is believed that only arts contained...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 433, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
... for the incarnation of these emotions. thus, giving government funding without any ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 626, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...e development of the contemporary arts. therefore, it can be regarded that the government...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...threatens the integrity of the arts. The chief reason for my disagreement aga...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
... statement lies on the empirical proof. since the government is giving the funding, t...
^^^^^
Line 15, column 346, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...versial to the contemporary government. thus, by funding artists and choosing whom t...
^^^^
Line 15, column 462, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...rol artists, which should be forbidden. therefore, it can be said that the funding threat...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, in general, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2475.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 484.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11363636364 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78657278328 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425619834711 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.7378725588 60.3974514979 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.857142857 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0476190476 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.579941367101 0.243740707755 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.22447584681 0.0831039109588 270% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159198774601 0.0758088955206 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325253322246 0.150359130593 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134679027045 0.0667264976115 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.