The vice president of the company building shopping malls is more persuaded that assign the job of the construction their access roads to Appian Roadways, instead of the Good Intentions Roadways, would be a better deal.
He recommend to incaricate the former with the prediction that their works will last at least four years. Even if he adduces some good reasons for his belief, there are still some unspoken questions that should be address.
First of all, he compares the conditions of two different Routes which have been completed by the competitors. He reports that one is versing in very bad and dangerous condition for drivers, while the other, that has a double age compared to Route 40, is still in good working shape. The question the VP is not asking is exactly why the conditions are so different amongst the streets; we are not told if the sites weather conditions of the Routes are not identical, but at least the same. To my knowledge, asphalt in cold climate, like the one that is faced at very high latitudes, is prone to get deteriorations due to the snow and ice covers that sits on the material, corroding it. A more favorable climatic condition could have help the preservation of one route despite the other.
Secondly, it could be a matter of the type of traffic travelling on this route. Heavy trucks, for example, are more likely to cause damages to streets. Hence, he should ask the company experts to check which type, if more car-like weights or truck-like one used to run on them.
In fact, an answer to it would help evaluating the recommendation.
Lastly, it is mainly a matter of costs. The VP should check the quality of the materials and the founds invested in the realizations of both the streets. He should also ask for a preview of the costs of roads constructions compared to the maintenance ones, because he could discover to be more convenient for his company to pay for the latter instead of invest more money in the beginning of the project.
At the very end, he sounds his recommendation on the information of the new acquired paving machine and new quality control manager. Still, he is apparently not inform about the reasons for this two new acquisitions: the first one could be simply because the old machine broke and needed to be changed (carefully, they didn’t buy a new one, but a state-of-the art one), and second there are no details about what should the quality control check, and it would not necessarily be the roads themselves.
In conclusion, while the recommendation the Vice president is coherent with the idea of looking for the best company, the motivations upon he funds it need more answers to unspoken questions.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 466 350
No. of Characters: 2157 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.646 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.629 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.9 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 4, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'recommends'.
Suggestion: recommends
...s Roadways, would be a better deal. He recommend to incaricate the former with the predi...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 214, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'addressed'?
Suggestion: addressed
... some unspoken questions that should be address. First of all, he compares the condi...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to evaluate' or 'evaluate'.
Suggestion: to evaluate; evaluate
.... In fact, an answer to it would help evaluating the recommendation. Lastly, it is ma...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, hence, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, still, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 465.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81075268817 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74353653446 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50752688172 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.3638238532 57.8364921388 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.277777778 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.094981345427 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302971058037 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516999982861 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.05027340771 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694647143515 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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