he author of the argument states that in the future, the problem of non satisfying performance of teacher will become less important. State’s teachers will in fact be required to take specific courses in education and educational psychology in order to be certificated.
Despite the soundness of this argument, a closer inspection of the assumptions on which it is based are needed.
First of all, the “poor teaching performance” is an expression lacking of significance: in fact, we should first define what good performance stands for, and if teachers are the only direct responsibles for high or low performance. While the author seems to be sure that the responsibility is totally on educators, it could be also a situation related to misunderstanding from the student themselves. Imagine to have an exchange student in class, it would be totally understandable if the scores of a student from Spain in English grammar were not excellent, and thus lowering the average of the class. In this scenario, the poor performance wouldn’t depend 100% on the instructor.
Secondly, the author bases the argument that improving teachers’ preparation on education and educational psychology would improve the standard. While it is certainly positive to have better prepared individuals in such field, it is ignored that maybe the poor performance is related specifically to their inability to transmit and convey information about the specific topic they are teaching. Let’s say that the professor is try to explain some abstruse math concepts: is unworthy to say that maybe the all D grades of the students could be related to his/her inefficacy in getting the kids understand it properly, due maybe to a scarce preparation of the teacher himself in this specific topic. In this case, the suggestions about the new requirements are completely useless.
There are two other important facts the writer is omitting, and they are both about time. It is said that the problem afflicting the state’s teachers will decrease in future, but is not said how much time will it be required to get the improvement effective, therefore since the timing of the improvement is unspoken, one could define this idea utopic rather than effective.
Moreover, while future school professionals will seek for the required credits in order to get the certification, nothing is mentioned about those that are already in the system (and therefore are contributing to the poor performances). It would be important to address both the issues together in a perspective view of changing and improvement.
In conclusion, we have defined many assumption that are not wrong, but they are for sure incomplete or even naïve for some points. If those assumptions prove wrong, the performance not only would not increase, but the state economy would get hit back because of the many resources invested in this almost completely ineffective solution. In addition, I would definetly need more clarifications about standards requirments and student evaluation to be persuaded by the writer and his suggestions.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 494 350
No. of Characters: 2516 1500
No. of Different Words: 241 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.714 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.093 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.973 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 112 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.606 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
he author of the argument states that in t...
^^
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'authors'.
Suggestion: authors
he author of the argument states that in the futu...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 412, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'Imagine having'.
Suggestion: Imagine having
...erstanding from the student themselves. Imagine to have an exchange student in class, it would ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 170, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...the state's teachers will decrease in future, but is not said how much time will it ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nging and improvement. In conclusion, we have defined many assumption that are...
^^
Line 11, column 33, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'many assumptions'.
Suggestion: many assumptions
...ent. In conclusion, we have defined many assumption that are not wrong, but they are for su...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2624.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 492.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17926982597 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510162601626 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4880137301 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.777777778 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212196499041 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672297084272 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755730550679 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103206129841 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854052136882 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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